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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2008-08-15 05:41 AM

you were waiting by the breakfast bar
pretending it was just waiting
for the moments to leave

I love you in nonchalant
with nothing else on
except perhaps mckuen

and that look in your eyes
like you want permission
and even to be punished slightly

for taking too long to get here
where we finally did
in our accidental meeting

which I had planned for a lifetime

________________

daark

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (08-15-2008 07:34 AM).]

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

1 posted 2008-08-15 06:43 AM

mmm mmmm.... Mr Daark.. love your planning skills here.. and love McKuen!

love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2008-08-15 07:36 AM

Ms r/b. Thanks pretty one, I too am a fan of the mckman.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

3 posted 2008-08-15 07:48 AM

really Mr Daark? ah ... now all makes sense to me! x RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

4 posted 2008-08-15 11:25 AM

D,

I think I am getting in my car right now and going to look for a poet to linger over coffee with. beautiful. I want mine over easy, please, with a dash of whipped cream in my coffee.

A

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2008-08-15 12:02 PM

Ms ali-san I hope you have someone in mind and don't just call dial-a-poet-coffee-and-oatmeal-dates. Pssssy they don't come with a warranty. Thanks lil one.

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2008-08-15 05:12 PM

for taking too long to get here
where we finally did
in our accidental meeting

which I had planned for a lifetime

I adore everything in this poem beginning with the title and ending with the apparent paradox which really centers the solar plexus and starts an infinity breath.

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

7 posted 2008-08-15 05:16 PM

ms mar, thank you for your adoring eyes and words on my humble offerings.

Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

8 posted 2008-08-15 07:42 PM

it's the noise of noon
when you come to me in silence
with downward glances.

I think Margherita described my feelings about this one perfectly...

Indigo

Gaelynsgirl
Member

since 2008-07-18

Posts 175
Ont. Canada

9 posted 2008-08-15 08:11 PM

I have been breathing in this poem most of the day. With sensual simplicity, it connects in a visceral way that leaves one breathless.
You are at your best here, Dark.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

10 posted 2008-08-16 06:25 AM

ms indi....thank you for your momentary hovering.

_______________

ms lynda, thank you for the soft side of your thoughts.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

11 posted 2008-08-16 08:56 PM

D

You know, I just had to come back to this one again too.

A

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