Open Poetry #43 |
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Bones Succumbed |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania ![]() |
Being a little street kid, you’d think on first thought that Bones would be used to almost anything. However, he wasn’t used to this, no, not to this. The pain was unbearable, and yet they kept coming at him. He knew he couldn’t survive it at all this time. As he screamed, and called out for his Mother, he succumbed. Bobby |
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Danny Cobb Member
since 2008-07-09
Posts 74 |
this is quite a captivating poem--but very vague, which does not give enough of the context and what was it that done Bones in! i'd say this is a good start of a poem, but tell me more---i'd like to know. danny cobb |
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MOCindy Member
since 2008-07-30
Posts 73 |
very true. Why do we think that they are tougher than average people? sigh!! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Thanks Danny, I'm sorry, I can't give anymore details. I grew up with bones, we were good friends. Bobby |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Thanks MOCindy, What you say is very true. Bones was just an average sort of person. Bobby |
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Danny Cobb Member
since 2008-07-09
Posts 74 |
I just read your reply here. That's okay--sometimes private matter need to be kept or treasured. Thanks though for the further info of this being about a friend of your, and your confidence as in the follow up poem of his blessed eternal destiny. danny cobb |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Thanks Danny Cobb, For your understanding on this delicate matter. Bobby |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Stunning! Thank you, on their behalf. - Owl |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Thanks dear Owl, I'm pleased this one worked for you in that way. Love Bobby |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Hi Bobby, poor helpless kid Bones. Prasad |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Thanks Prasad, You have described the situation with Bones very accurately. Bobby |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Thank you Bobby. For many reasons, I am also glad that he called out for his mother - difficult to explain why, but I think that you may understand some of my reasons. - Owl |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Thanks dear OwlSA, He call out to "mother" because that's who raised him. That's who I would call out to too. Bobby |
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