Open Poetry #43 |
Hot Salsa |
BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Winds are restless in the stillness where the heat ripples low to the ground. Like a salsa dance staged on a blue mesa. Matching step for step hip to hip plateaus and rolls a slow shimmy across the desert floor. A mirage of mirrors smoothe as sandstone polish the edges and pick up the tempo unrelenting. There are no curtain calls to soothe the sweltering it hustles at a fast paced allure bringing the heat to a boil. Pure and unadulterated sweat rolls off the back the salt serves to pepper the natural beauty. Cactus flowers compete with the sunset painting the landscape in hot pinks and canary yellow for shock effect. A desert garden thrives planted firmly. She gathers her skirts looking back remembering when she turns her face to the wind. [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (07-27-2008 10:43 PM).] |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Oh, this is so very pretty and well written. I so enjoy your writing, Blues. Ida |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Well, Bluesy, That was a switch I didn't see coming. But the best part is that without any sea references it rocked just the same. Thanks for that. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms bluezy...you would be sexy doing salsa moves...can imagine you that way..kewl penstuff ms |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
How romantic, makes one feel young and dreamy ... your language is highly appealing. Love, Margherita |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
Blues- Rhythmic and tactile, scented with desert breezes and spiked with flashes of color. This makes me wanna dance! :-) Indigo |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Ohh, I hear it, that hot salsa beat - and though you didn't say, her skirts are Spanish red - I know because I see it all too! Llllllllllovely! - Owl |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
LOL before reading, I thought, ouuu this is about Salsa (The food)And I started to crave chips and spicy Salsa Nice poem!-- Well Written ARCTIC WIND |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You sassy salsa, you! Loved the feel of the write and how you engaged so many of my senses! Vividly compelling! Captivating ~ as you, yourself are! Loving hug, Linda |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Hot it is, Bluesy! It was a treat to see your name as I scrolled down, but this was extra-ordinary! One of your best, I think. May I be a copy-cat and agree with all of those who responded? Tremendous imagery and analogy! A keeper this is! miscellanea |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Sassy! LOL! ·´~`·»Brett«·´~`· |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
This is lovely, Bluesy! Most descriptive and captivating. Too late for me to dance the salsa but it is a delight to watch. Hugs Helen |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
What a colorful saucy poem, filled with delightful imagery! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks to each of you for sampling this~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I lived in the desert for 18 years and your salsa dance brings back so many memories. You deserve special kudos for this one. Your imagery in this was quite well done and the whole piece just had a natural flow. Count me in for a salsa dance anytime and the ending ... -------------------------------------------------- She gathers her skirts looking back remembering when she turns her face to the wind. -------------------------------------------------- EXCELLENT!!!!! |
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TheAnonDavid Member
since 2008-08-28
Posts 237UK |
It's all been said but I just wanted to add my note of appreciation. Do not go gentle into that good night. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Dear Mark~ Thank you so much for your kind reply, and for digging this up again. I'm delighted to find you here. I really appreciate your note. Thanks and welcome, David~ |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderful! Lived just outside Phoenix for a while and in Long Beach area of California. Spent a lot of time in the desert between and around the two -- this brought much of back in splendor.... Very much enjoyed touch here... jimmy |
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viking_metal Senior Member
since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337In a Jeep, Minnesota. |
This was very interesting and well written! I loved it. I used to know how to salsa. Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade, Enjoyed the read of the Salsa beat. Well done... BC |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
There are no curtain calls to soothe the sweltering it hustles at a fast paced allure bringing the heat to a boil. Pure and unadulterated sweat rolls off the back the salt serves to pepper the natural beauty. WOOOOOWEEEEEEEE!!! Lori, That's HOTTTT!! LOL |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"Pure and unadulterated sweat rolls off the back the salt serves to pepper the natural beauty" just love the lines here...too cool...an excellent write... |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
So fine...James |
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