Open Poetry #43 |
Just the girl next door |
Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Just the girl next door So sick of listening To the sound of my own tears I try to hide my emotions from the world But i cant hide them from you Every now and then I try just a little bit harder But it doesn't heal the pain of knowing You don't see me that way As my night tears start to form The morning dew on the ground And the flowers fill the air with fragrances That fills my head with the scent of you My troubled heart Is still in the dark of my sorrow You only choose me when you are hurting Why don't you see me, hold me, chose me, But you don't see my saddened eyes Blurring with tears As again my heart becomes shattered Into thousands of little pieces Being consumed by darkness Loosing all hope Of your arms to hold me together I once again fade into the shadows Now i have to see you In the arms of another And my heart is broken once more Will i just be the best friend for ever Just the girl you grew up with From next door Annie 12-11-2008 |
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SlowlyFallAway Member
since 2008-08-29
Posts 279North Carolina |
You only choose me when you are hurting. I love that line, too many times it feels people are like that. They don't notice you until they're lonely or broken and no one else is there for them except you... Because you always cared for them. I liked this write. Good job. |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you.. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo dear Anniepimm, I'm afraid this all rather runs together. Always capitalize your first person singular pronouns. Bobby |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Anniepimm - written with many emotions, felt them as I read this write. Wish you the best... BC |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Reminds me of the old Eddy Arnold song "You Don't Know Me" You have captured the sorrow of the situation so very well..... Eric you give your hand to me and then you say hello and i can hardly speek my heart is beating so and anyone can tell you think you know me well but you don't know me no you don't know the one who dreams of you at knight who longs to kiss your lips and longs to hold you tight to you i'm just a friend that's all i've ever been but you don't know me chorus i never knew the art of making love though my heart achs with love for you afraid and shy i let my chance go by the chance that you might have loved me too you give your hand to me and then you say goodby i watch you walk away beside that lucky guy and you will never know the one who loves you so no you don't know me |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Wish i could hear the music to that song the words are lovely, cant say that i have ever heard it before Thank you all for your feedback |
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sarah 45 Member
since 2008-12-19
Posts 54 |
Me liky, that's cool but I'll say 4get about him , if he doesn't you shouldn't eather |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
I agree with you lol Thank you.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Annie, I'm catching up on my reading...so, a belated Welcome to Passions!!! Please, check your email for a Very Special Welcome! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you sunshine it,s beautiful |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
Dear Anniepimm Thank you for your effort that you spend in the forum I hope to see more from you nice words to see it , wish to you all the best . Waiting your next thread with our longing Best regards & Good day |
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Anniepimm Senior Member
since 2008-12-26
Posts 550England |
Thank you I will endeavor to write more and better
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