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Isolation Blue
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Isolation Blue |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Isolation Blue In a distant world of darkness far from the home town girl in the midst of foreign oceans there's a lonely soldier's world where the pen of love stops talking when a promise turns untrue and far away there's isolation blue Chorus: Memoirs of pages filled with passion tear stained letters in pockets full of truth dreams inked on promise after action a river of words in isolation blue There's night skies lacking moonlight when a lover loses face and a soldier can get buried in the dirt inside his veins and the chapters of defeat are written with ancient rules and far away there's isolation blue. There's a lover's fire an old desire a distant fading flame where wayward winds keep blowing cross an icy memory lane and the brightest leaves of Autumn become colors of the truth and far away there's isolation blue. Memoirs of pages filled with passion tear stained letters in pockets full of truth dreams inked on promise after action a river of words in isolation blue. IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS. |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
Truly an outstanding song/poem, Eric! I do this all the time, also: write song lyrics (without having written the music.) People underestimate how perfect music writing is when compared to writing poetry: there is meter, rhythm, you can even tap out the beat to the words while you write to get the cadence perfect. Jeff |
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nourzihane Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 254Algeria |
Dear ethome thank you for your thread that was added by your pen and i hope to see more from you Wish to u all the best Best regards & Good day Nourzihane |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
there was a beautiful melancholy that set in as I read your work...and that is a good thing....certainly do admire that special breed called songwriters...have a daughter who is gifted in that area...constantly amazed and in awe at your 'club'...I just don't have the talent for admission in that one, I'm afraid...excellent write |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Jeff, nourzihane & Steve. I do appreciate the visit and read so very much.....Drop in anytime. Eric IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You're so talented, lovie. "and a soldier can get buried in the dirt inside his veins and the chapters of defeat are written with ancient rules" That part especially sang to my soul.  It's lovely to read you again.  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Celeste Always good to read you too! I appreciate words quoted. Eric |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The loneliness you write is palpable... I can just see shoulders straightening even as his heart is slumping, sliding into bleak. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
ethome - I wish we lived closer together so we could get together and play a few tunes... BC |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Suthern I always look forward to hearing from you. I'm glad the mood came across that way. Eric Bill Yes, that would be nice for sure. Thanks for dropping in and commenting. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandID=31974 Eric |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Excellent. Ida |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Eric, This makes a good blues song. Bobby |
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