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Open Poetry #43

a slight for the trite

norunnin
Member

since 2008-10-16

Posts 71

0 posted 2008-12-18 07:53 PM

trite
you heard me
all that you can be
is trite
your future is bright
if you think cubicles are alright
a slight
is what i give you
i don't want you to die
i just wanna see you cry
then after a while
ill burn you on the pyre

viking_metal
Senior Member

since 2007-02-02

Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.

1 posted 2008-12-19 10:10 AM

Dark. Good. I am interested.

-Paul

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2008-12-19 10:24 AM

This honesty is hard for some to take but it's a reality.

Need any verbal matches?

Eric

norunnin
Member

since 2008-10-16

Posts 71

3 posted 2008-12-19 04:35 PM

sure any ideas or critiques would be awsome.
but yea... people dont seem to like what i write.
it get kinda discouraging sometimes

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