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norunnin
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since 2008-10-16
Posts 71


0 posted 2008-12-18 07:53 PM



trite
you heard me
all that you can be
is trite
your future is bright
if you think cubicles are alright
a slight
is what i give you
i don't want you to die
i just wanna see you cry
then after a while
ill burn you on the pyre



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viking_metal
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since 2007-02-02
Posts 1337
In a Jeep, Minnesota.
1 posted 2008-12-19 10:10 AM


Dark. Good. I  am interested.


-Paul

Some people fall in love and touch the sky, some people fall in love and find quicksand.

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
2 posted 2008-12-19 10:24 AM


This honesty is hard for some to take but it's a reality.

Need any verbal matches?

Eric

norunnin
Member
since 2008-10-16
Posts 71

3 posted 2008-12-19 04:35 PM


sure any ideas or critiques would be awsome.
but yea... people dont seem to like what i write.
it get kinda discouraging sometimes

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