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Open Poetry #43

school ground 60's in blueray

Dark Stranger
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since 2001-03-19

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West Coast

0 posted 2008-12-15 11:46 AM

I guess we always wanted to believe
that there was a god who would pretend
that he was noah, with this thing for pairs
and that we might just arc across the gap
from immoral to immortal happily after

but he sent his car for you instead
when you were sleeping in the sand dunes
and didn't have time to pack your gown
or the shoes you would wear to heaven
if you had time to dress up on sunday

I saw the driver at the seven eleven too
and knew something in the empty of his eyes
that he could only fill that place again
if he had your face in his mirrors
like a key to the pearl place lockers

where he was always the only lifetime member

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daark

steavenr
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1 posted 2008-12-15 12:57 PM

"from immoral to immortal happily after" ...interesting concept in a very interesting premise...specially loved the "Sunday shoes" idea...another excellent write (was there any doubt, though?)

Rick
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since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

2 posted 2008-12-15 01:28 PM

daark, a very interesting read here, we all have so many ideas and thoughts about God and heaven, or not, I would like to believe that someone will take us in hand to rest in peace. Thanks for the read my friend.

Rick

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2008-12-15 02:01 PM

steavenr, thanks guy...I appreciate your reviews.

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Thanks Rick...I suspect He takes some from here to there...often wonder how picky He is..but then again not sure that is a God trait..

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

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Eternity

4 posted 2008-12-16 07:58 AM

quote:
but he sent his car for you instead
when you were sleeping in the sand dunes
and didn't have time to pack your gown
or the shoes you would wear to heaven
if you had time to dress up on sunday

This is so deeply touching, your sensitivity shows.

Wonderfully written, dear Poet!

Love,
Margherita

Dark Stranger
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West Coast

5 posted 2008-12-16 08:29 AM

ms mar, thanks babe!

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