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Moroccan sky |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
It is a Moroccan sky, that I hit with my hands as a Persian carpet in the colours of blood… Dust leaves as my memories, blown off by the wind as blue hurt clouds. It is a Moroccan sky that I keep in memory, rose as your lipstick, strange as my missing life. [This message has been edited by 2islander2 (12-14-2008 04:49 AM).] |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Yann, you did a wondrous job with this one. I would like to read the French version too, in case you did this first in French. Wonderful imagery and emotions! Love, Margherita  "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Margherita, thanks a lot for the kind comment, I give you the french version cause I wrote in french (not always) first, C'est un ciel marocain que je frappe de mes mains comme un tapis persan dans des couleurs de sang. La poussière s'en va comme mes souvenirs expatriés par le vent tels des nuages blessés. C'est un ciel marocain que je garde en mémoire, rose comme ton rouge à lèvres étrange comme ma vie. Certains mots ne correspondent pas et je les ai rajouté dans le poème anglais. ou supprimés dans le poème français... [This message has been edited by 2islander2 (12-13-2008 09:33 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Absolutely beautiful. Merci! The French version is...delicious! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Both versions are lovely, Yann, but I love the French one best. - Owl |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Midnitsun for the kind comment, I was at school and looking at the window I saw a wonderful rose sky that inspired me the first verse, at home I finished the poem... yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thank you Owl, I was just thinking of you today, missing your comments and guess what....I wish you are fine with your new job. yann |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
enchanting and enticing poem |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Morocco...smile. Thank you. I need to put that on my list of places to see, through mine own eyes. I always feel a deja vu when I see pictures of it... thank you!  |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
such beautiful phrases that create such awe-inspiring images...your command of the English language is amazing...thank you for sharing |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks a lot Igoddess, I'm glad you enjoyed it. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi serenity, you comment may be a sign that you can have something to do there, the country is wonderful and people amazing...Thank you for the kind comment. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Thanks steavenr, I always appreciate your comments that are precious. yann |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Quelle image! J'aime bien ta version française, cher Yann! |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi margherita en relisant ton commentaires j'écrirai plutot maintenant bleus nuages blessés. amitiés yann |
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