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Pause In The Attic
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Pause In The Attic |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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Pause In The Attic In the attic dry, dark, the stubbled itch of sweat and fiber insulation. I step over furnace ducts, balancing on two beams. A triangle vent gives strips of sunlight from outdoors, where for a moment, I revel in the morning glories. |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
AH, Attics are just not what they used to be. Enjoyed your fresh insight."late" |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
You've depicted a moment of marvel wonderfully. Great write. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I literally got dizzy on these lines: "balancing on two beams." ...nice |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
The pause that truly refreshes. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Late is first -- how kewl! And you're right, they waste so much space these days....I could put a 20'x30' room up there, but the local zoning board would either nix it or force me to make it a "loft" instead, open to my living room's cathedral ceiling...... Hi, Amusemi -- glad I could! There's a story behind that flower image..... while I was up there fixing furnace ducts, I looked into one of the bazillion boxes of old stuff we have stored, and Voila! there was the first book of haiku poetry I ever owned, packed up with children's books we'd saved as keepsakes.....I opened it, and there was a poem by Basho: I am one Who eats his breakfast gazing at the morning glories..... My poem is really a response to his. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
A Kodak moment! ~ and I enjoyed sharing it with you!  Something as seemingly simple as sunliligt casting light upon a beamed attic floor, truly can be glorious ~ especially when spied by by the eyes of a sensitive poet!  Don't be such a stranger, Poet Man! Giving you a warm, welcome-back pip hug, Linda  |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Howdy steavenr! I'm glad you picked up on that....it's bigtime risky to use the spatial layout of a poem as part of the narrative, but sometimes I can't resist doing it. They used to call it ekphrasis, but now the word means using one art form to describe a work in another -- like Disney's Fantasia using animation to bring out a story from those pieces of music. Now they call it "concrete" or some such, which doesn't fit at all, considering how light a touch you have to use with it! But I'm a fool for it anyway, and I still call it ekphrasis, because that's how I was introduced to it back in the day. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Hi EA! Hello Midnite! Yes, I've missed this place....needed a break, but not a break-off, so here I am like the proverbial penny. I get hot just thinking about that attic, so I most definitely did need that pause....though it was a pause over the book I found up there by sheer serendipity. And that particular book? It was the one that got me started writing haiku in the first place, found on the morning when I'd been musing about how I ought to re-sharpen my pencil on that genre. Message? You bet! Refreshing? Oh yes...... ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
A triangle vent gives strips of sunlight from outdoors, where for a moment, I revel in the morning glories. ************************** Yep, nice to be diverted from the mundane and to transcend if only for a moment. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The only paws in the attic get are when my evil cats run up the ladder when I'm not looking!  |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Thank you for elaboraating about the flower on this piece...I would have never guessed...I pictured morning rays of sunshine as the glory... My favorites are poems that have that multi-dimensional metaphor thing going on...the more in one punch the better. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Ah, then we are birds of a feather..... .....huh? What does that mean? Birds with one feather between them? What do they do, take turns flapping wildly? Sounds kinda bare to me.... ......of a feather, because there's nothing I like more than to angle-in layers of implication, dimensions, I call them. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Hi Bal -- could be rats too, around my place.....know any good exterminators? ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
True it is, oh goddess of inkedness.....and I was needing one pretty badly at that point. But that morning I did a job the heating/air-conditioning people wanted about $5000 to do for me, so I guess I can't complain! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Rats don't have paws, Ed. They have footsies. It's appropriate that the ratleader would have them around  |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Yes very itchy up their -Juju |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sure they all have paws, and sometimes they bring their maws and a cuz or two........ ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Dat be ooh too twoo, Juju! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You know I appreciate the poem. *S* Do you know how much I appreciate the responses, too? *S* Whatever the term, no one uses the visual impact of a poem better than you. *S* Thank heavens for haikus... and moments that transcend time and space. *S* |
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