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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
the more it becomes, the less it is while less is lost in others' more no vict'ry won in loss's glory no shining for the dark of dawn satisfaction guaranteed like shifting sand that swallows whole the soul of man in gulps of deep distress in gulfs of sorrow's cold duress the more I become, the less I am while loss is less in others' stares while cold is settled like morning's dew ere heat of day its message spreads the more the less is so becoming the less is lost in unfulfilling |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Are you more or less saying that less is more? lol  Steave, I'm trying to get my mind wrapped around this, but I think I'm too tired to think straight this evening! What I do know is that I want more of your writing ~ not less of it! lol  Warm hug 'n a smiley face, Linda |
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TRACE2RYM Junior Member
since 2008-10-09
Posts 38 |
Ok, Thats not fair, I was going to say what she said, or did she say what I thought? The more I think about it, the less I think I know what I am talking about, I think!!!!mmmmn |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: The evolution of spirit discards what might have seemed important and grows out of "measurements". I love your deeply poetic philosophical ponderings, dear Steaven. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Certainly a mind bender, especially without a full cup coffee ingested...great write!! |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Sorry Steav' I just didn't get, my more was less when I finished reading. Take care my friend. Lindsay |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Sorry Steav' I just didn't get it, my more was less when I finished reading. Take care my friend. Lindsay |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Linda, you are always so kind...hope you've had a chance to get your mind wrapped around this one...regardless, thank you for your generous comments TRACE, hey, though life isn't even fair, I love your play on the words of this...thanks...I appreciate it Margherita, thank you for your insightful comments, and pointing out what I believe is the heart of this write amusemi, I agree...there is never a bad time for coffee...but this one may have needed a java-rich moment...thanks for reading and commenting Lindsay, sorry, my friend, but here is a brief help file...I find that the more I do (for lack of a better word), the less my more becomes by virtue of its lessened quality. (Ergo, the age-old debate of quality vs. quantity) So much so, that the issue infects me as to define me and my more is less, while my less is more. And following on, there is simply no fulfillment in doing more, for it becomes less in the observations and opinions of others...this may not help, but it might...if it doesn't, a cup of coffee will surely do the job  |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Thanks Steav' for the explanation Lindsay |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Steaven, I so often read your poetry again and again before I respond. You use words so well and I love how you bring them all together. Alison |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
there is a part of truth I think, "the more I become, the less I am" as for every word we have to consider the yes and the no of it, but I really understand what you mean, we are transforming ourselves permanently and it brings a lot... thank you for sharing a beautiful poem. yann |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
sounds like a twister for the tongue the mind and the heart cool....... live, rejoice, love that's where it's at |
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Vestibular Bard Member
since 2008-12-11
Posts 284New York |
More can be less, And less can be more, Until it is something new, That we really want. Then we only need, Less rigid philosophy, And we can be happy. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
Lindsay, no prob--glad to be of some help Alison, you pay a high compliment...I am both flattered and humbled...thank you kindly yann, I appreciate your generous remarks...they are both insightful and thoughtful inked, you have it right on every count...love your summation...truly, that IS where it is at V Bard, ahh, but if it becomes new, is it truly new? or is it simply the old (which we've grown tired of) and hence that which cannot make us happy simply by changing our worn out philosophy? just wondering...anyway, thank you for reading and commenting |
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