Open Poetry #43 |
To You |
vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
To You To you My love I am writing this to you Telling to you That I still love you I know You are away And I am saying this all To you Time flies Without you To you Giving my rest to you Giving you the best To you I am writing this to you Because I want to fix This piece of a broken heart To you I want you back in my life To you I loved you With all my heart |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
very hearty and hearfelt write |
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Pestillence Junior Member
since 2008-09-03
Posts 25England |
I liked the concept and the words are obviously very personal and heartfelt. I just don't think I liked the constant 'to you' but I liked the heart on your sleeve nature of the poem, good job |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
I liked the persistence of the "to you's" throughout this...it gave it a special quality |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Lovely Write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
vandana - if this doesn't touch him... this writing says it as you feel... BC |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...James |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
I think you will fix the broken heart, dear Vandana! This is pure heart in action. Love, Margherita |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I loved you With all my heart I understand this yearning to turn back time... you wrote it well! *S* |
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KandyGrl511 Member
since 2008-11-30
Posts 52Michigan |
great poem! i really liked it!?! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Vandana, There is good and loving emotion shown in this poem. Love Bobby |
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