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| Open Poetry #43 |
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The Old House Boat |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Ballad She spoke with style so sincere but she masked a hidden grief. She talked too fast, forced her laugh, too much smoke with her heat. Like desire that's gone mad her soul was never still but my blind eyes she unclad and touched my heart with thrills I knew she owed her life's cares to a man that was married but he kept her dreams so impaired that her smile had grown weary she longed to speak with a voice where she could gather true respect but she never got to make the choice and she suffered from neglect. One night on my old house boat she said; "I need to love someone I need to change my scene. I need to love someone who'll give their heart to me. I need to love someone need to love'em day and night, I need to love someone cause my heart's not working right." So I'd try to stroke her sore heart chords and ease the pain she'd reaped but she'd turn off as I was getting close and stare away from me. I could hear her heart when we'd begin my slow hands would move her soul I'd speak soft cares to give her room but some trouble left her cold. Then we met one night on the old house boat her face was blank unsure. So we sat on the deck, she let it out like rain her heart thoughts poured the mind she spilled gave me a chill I could sense her childlike hopes. Said she wished her dreams were real but she looked so down and out. So I asked how her dreams might happen because I knew she'd come so clean. She replied she'd left the empty mess and hoped she'd stay with me. said she was outcast lonely her heart had honest grief if she became my one and only she'd give me everything I need (pause) Well, she looked so pure and simple that I took her in my arms and in my ear she whispered gentle with a voice so damned disarmed. "I need to love someone I need to change my scene. I need to love someone who'll give their heart to me. I need to love someone need to love 'em day and night, I need to love someone cause my heart's not working right." That was the day she came to stay! © Eric True IF YOU HAVE TO JUDGE SOMEONE DO IT ON THE SIDE OF MERCY AND LET TIME SEASON THE RESULTS. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
 Dear Eric... I did so enjoy this.. it actually seems like a song to me... I am so pleased it had a happy ending... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks RDB Yes, it a long folk style ballad.....Meant for the acoustic guitar sort of thing. Eric |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
well it is just perfect for that!! Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Dear Eric, I enjoyed your Ballad greatly and I am sure if I could hear you sing it accompanied with the guitar, it would be wonderful. It's nice to see you back. I love your very poignant poem. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My word, Eric, you are quite the lyricist!!! What a touching ballad! It certainly engaged my emotions! Oh, and I liked the happy ending! ~ or should I say, "beginning"!   Linda |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks again RDB much appreciated as always. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Many thanks Margherita for the read and the wonderful comments.....Glad to be here. Eric |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nice write, I can hear the boards of the dock creaking as they walked toward the houseboat. |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
Wow! This is fantastic. You are a wonderful writer. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Angel for the read and the lovely response. Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Barry good to hear from you. Thanks for the creaking, maybe it sounds like my bones these days.....LOL! Eric |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Rose and Vandana I sure appreciate the visit and the kind words. Eric |
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