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Another claim
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Another claim |
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noorOH New Member
since 2008-11-09
Posts 4 |
Another claim In a city away, there is this blaze Where all can maze, and blew their ways Where no hearts can break, no tears can shade and pain is slaved Dwelled in what they say. Captured in space Species of plain diverted to a claim An assumed claim waddled to a stain. A simple way No harm, no effort just a do Results release you and karma beneath you You fight your way to the void of fate and clay Committing to meet the immortal path where you see the world in his eyes, and his eyes everywhere in the world. An encouragement of an illusion, a distinguished happily ever after A burden of an avoiding strife, one hammered heart A Lightning to glimmer to hide a polished smile I don’t want to stop but the darkness of my solitude is done. Concealing, obtaining the puddles of creations A conscious goddess to graze our inner grace Sweet sights of bounded lies shed down with bubble drops heading to embrace their kinds. ..But The heart won't beat. The trees won't bleed. And the poem will exceed. And yes, it is a soothing dream |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Hello! ~ and welcome to pipTalk! I enjoyed your debuting poem! "In a city away, there is this blaze Where all can maze, and blew their ways Where no hearts can break, no tears can shade and pain is slaved" "A conscious goddess to graze our inner grace"  ~ "And yes, it is a soothing dream" Beautiful thoughts and images! Giving you a warm, welcoming pip hug, Earth Angel  |
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noorOH New Member
since 2008-11-09
Posts 4 |
thank you, im trying to accomplish what i can do best, english is my second language and it means alot to me that u liked it  |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Welcome to pip!!   ARCTIC WIND |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
noorOH - welcome with your first write. You'll find many great people here... BC |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I keep coming back to this...for this: "Committing to meet the immortal path where you see the world in his eyes, and his eyes everywhere in the world." That's a great line, there! Welcome to Pip.  |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Noor, Welcome to PiP. I enjoyed your poem a lot. Please, keep sharing. I thought the ending kind of hammered everything home. quote: I like this part lots. Alison |
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