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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2008-11-03 12:30 PM

As Time comes near

She wraps herself
a triology of
treasures

as time comes near

of season's embers
sent to go

the burgundys
and persimmons

that roam on stones

the remnants of once
her thriving wares

and dulcet tones
that sang
upon her broken bough

of roots
to keep her sane
when frost conceals
her virgin glow

as time comes near

she feels it

in the earth's rotation
that brews beneath
the change to stark

her days of green
soon to slumber
amid the songbirds
as they sojourn south

[This message has been edited by Balladeer (11-23-2008 07:05 PM).]

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

1 posted 2008-11-03 02:26 PM

You know that is what I miss the most with the change to this season, the sound of the birds. You captured the feelings and transition so well.

sandgrain
Member Elite

since 1999-09-21

Posts 3662
Sycamore, IL, USA

2 posted 2008-11-03 02:45 PM

Your chosen words glorified the season's change, making even the sadly missed bird's song a thing of beauty.

God bless,
Rae

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2008-11-03 03:35 PM

"her days of green
soon to slumber
amid the absence
of the birds of song"

this is beautiful (not just this stanza-the whole write) and your imagery is outstanding...lovely write...need to go back and enjoy it again

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

4 posted 2008-11-03 04:32 PM

inkedgoddess - I read your words, close my eyes, and hear them over again...

BC

Oklahoma Rose
Senior Member

since 2008-02-28

Posts 1586
Oklahoma USA

5 posted 2008-11-04 08:26 PM

I love to sit and listen to and watch the birds.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

6 posted 2008-11-05 06:06 AM

Ms Inky.. just beautiful!! love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2008-11-05 12:08 PM

good read

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

8 posted 2008-11-06 07:58 AM

I do love the whole of it and particularly the conclusion, so filled with emotion. So beautiful!!

Love,
Margherita

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

9 posted 2008-11-08 02:13 PM

..."her days of green
soon to slumber
amid the sojourn
of the birds of song"

Fantastic feel to this one.
I especially loved your ending line.
Enjoyed

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

10 posted 2008-11-10 09:41 AM

thanks everyone for stopping by

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

11 posted 2008-11-20 12:30 PM

Such a gentle way of looking at it.....I make a thousand warlike declarations, and accomplish less.

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Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

12 posted 2008-11-20 12:36 PM

I have a passion for nature and anything that adds emotions to it. You were excellent in achieving this making it so worth the read. Read it a second time aloud and it became even more enjoyable in doing so. You painted it, we viewed it and the scene was museum worthy. Well done.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

13 posted 2008-11-22 11:48 PM

This is beautiful.

A

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