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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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Hinting at imperfection with a look of hopeful predilection. Slipping hand over spined infraction, wondering of its appearance and this connection. No selflessness in this touch, feels of life’s first rebuff. Desire of blood and flesh a piece of what cannot be worn for long enough. Lovers obsession embodied in an understated affection. When memory interlaces with false transgression. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Susan - you do write well of deep feelings. Your poetry, from what I've seen so far is of you. Wish you well, time heels all, at least it did for me... BC |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"with a look of hopeful predilection." I delighted in seeing your established preference for using "...tion" words here. Very cool! And as far as understanding all the connections as to why a relationship ends ... well ... I do not know the answer ... but hopefully your heart-felt writing will help. Please WRITE for you. Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this one moves so well that when you come to the end, you want to scroll down for even more... |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
interesting.. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
When memory interlaces with false transgression. says it all~~  M |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Dear Susan.. this is wonderful! love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you all... this was meant to be about self-loathing and what we do at times to feel good.. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your phrasing of your look into the mirror of yourself hits with hard impact and as a reader, I could feel the intensity of your write. Well done. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Lots of Intensity Indeed Susan!!!  ARCTIC WIND |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Susan, this delivers exactly what I have always loved about your writing. That honesty, and the impact that comes with it. Loved it. A pleasure to read you again hon. ~D |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you.. Something that bothers me about this is that it seems disjointed. I had someone recently tell me that I use pronouns too much (in real life, not poetry) so I did this first with the pronouns then took them out. In a way the disjointed feel of it goes with the disjointed feeling of self-loathing and the actions accociated with trying to feel better about ones self even if that means in the end it will cause more self loathing. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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