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Stacey011 Junior Member
since 2008-10-27
Posts 18Australia |
I look up, At the sky, So blue, So pink, So dark. I hold on, To all that, I have, to grasp, And to grip. The grass below, Has it's magical effects, As i slowly let go, And fall, To heal. I breathe in, The air that's here, That for so long, I denied, Scared to survive. I look up, At the sky, So blue, So pink, So bright. ------------------------------------------------- I have just written this right here and now, while browsing through this forum. I would love some feedback, good or bad --- cheers! |
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bslicker 
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Welcome i like quick thoughts, enjoyed bernie  A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. Bernie Slicker |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Welcome! This held me captive! So quick and effective, loved this The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone. |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
it is quite interesting and enjoyable. yann |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Not bad, Stacey Ida |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
=) well put.... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
welcome to PiP, good write...especially liked" "I breathe in, The air that's here, That for so long, I denied, Scared to survive" and you have it right--reading the work of others here is an excellent source of inspiration |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
WELCOME TO PIP! ARCTIC WIND |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The only critique I would offer, Stacey, is to hold back on all of the commas, but that's just a personal thing.  Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love ~*~ KRJ |
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Stacey011 Junior Member
since 2008-10-27
Posts 18Australia |
WOW!! Thank you for all the lovely replies! I really appreciate it. I am very excited to be here. And i really appreciate everyone letting me know what they thought. Sunshine, thanks for the comment, and of course the card I know what you mean about the comma's, i have a really bad habbit of always putting too many in! Cheers! |
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