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Dreamflight
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since 2008-10-22
Posts 15
USA

0 posted 2008-10-24 03:08 PM


dark sapphire-waves
kissed by lunar light
water-jewels spray
silver in the night

ocean on the sand
like a lover's touch
rose petals, silent, float
stars reflect their blush

sea-breeze over land
fingers of air caress
the rays upon the surf
aurora lays to rest

waves' voice is gentle, strong
their tongues, cool liquid flame
lapping at the words
traced in a heart, two names

I left it all behind, and never said goodbye...

© Copyright 2008 Kate - All Rights Reserved
steavenr
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since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058

1 posted 2008-10-24 03:28 PM


first, wow, and welcome to PiP...a very cool write (and you are a hyphenator--yeah!) great words with nice cadence...will look at this one again and again
Janette
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2 posted 2008-10-24 04:02 PM


"fingers of air caress"

I just adore the imagery this creates for me, fabulous line.

And welcome to Passions!

Janette

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

tsu
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since 2008-10-20
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u.k.
3 posted 2008-10-24 05:18 PM


"dark sapphire-waves
kissed by lunar light"
..loved this opening and the flow of your words.

Dreamflight
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since 2008-10-22
Posts 15
USA
4 posted 2008-10-24 09:07 PM


Thanks for your comments, everyone!  I might not be around as much as I'd like - school's taking up a lot of my time.  But I'll try to post as much as I can.  =)

I left it all behind, and never said goodbye...

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
5 posted 2008-10-25 10:52 AM


Welcome to Passions
Stunning write.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
6 posted 2008-10-26 01:26 PM


Welcome to PIP, Dreamflight. Your poetry is beautiful, intriguing and will surely add a new dimension to the site.
                              Ida

Dark Star
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since 2008-02-20
Posts 392
Lost in your eyes
7 posted 2008-10-26 03:15 PM


I love the heart, its everything
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