Open Poetry #43 |
Heart on the Sand |
Dreamflight Junior Member
since 2008-10-22
Posts 15USA |
dark sapphire-waves kissed by lunar light water-jewels spray silver in the night ocean on the sand like a lover's touch rose petals, silent, float stars reflect their blush sea-breeze over land fingers of air caress the rays upon the surf aurora lays to rest waves' voice is gentle, strong their tongues, cool liquid flame lapping at the words traced in a heart, two names I left it all behind, and never said goodbye... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
first, wow, and welcome to PiP...a very cool write (and you are a hyphenator--yeah!) great words with nice cadence...will look at this one again and again |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"fingers of air caress" I just adore the imagery this creates for me, fabulous line. And welcome to Passions! Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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tsu Junior Member
since 2008-10-20
Posts 29u.k. |
"dark sapphire-waves kissed by lunar light" ..loved this opening and the flow of your words. |
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Dreamflight Junior Member
since 2008-10-22
Posts 15USA |
Thanks for your comments, everyone! I might not be around as much as I'd like - school's taking up a lot of my time. But I'll try to post as much as I can. =) I left it all behind, and never said goodbye... |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome to Passions Stunning write. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Welcome to PIP, Dreamflight. Your poetry is beautiful, intriguing and will surely add a new dimension to the site. Ida |
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Dark Star Member
since 2008-02-20
Posts 392Lost in your eyes |
I love the heart, its everything |
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