Makeshift Midnight....(Song Poem in audio with beat)

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Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23

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california

0 posted 2008-10-24 02:20 AM

Click on Link, then click button that says
"Play Hi Fi"
http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7000673

Makeshift Midnight

Time Capsule
in a television box
I watch grainy
black and white
dead people.

Colorless people
dancing around
as stale as the
served crumpets
to static trumpets
played by dead
colored jesters.
That are sequestered.

In time will choose to rebel
But for now they jive
and let it fester.

All with lively
smiles and breath
oblivious to all
but the flash
they are frozen in.
the death

Gut rot punch and
hand rolled cigarettes
gulped and burned
in excess
almost as if knowing
without showing
they were being
immortalized.
Or at the very least canonized
for at the very least my own eyes,
at least.

I walk outside bereft
The neighbors to the left
have their sprinklers set for midnight,
They kick on mid cigarette.
Under a full moon trying its best
to offer its version of afternoon delight.
I put my hand in my pocket
Dig some lent and flick it towards the skyyy
It wrestles with the pull of the world and
weightlessness of being trivial to divinity’s eye,
just like you and I.

my thoughts are Amassed
in division and harassed
From the smart a**ed
cynicism and derision
my fork tongue whips into this night,
and the next night, and the next.
It’s not a natural way of being
But I’m seeing that unnatural is my nature
Stamped with a guarantee in efforts
to spoil surprise endings of a displaced rapture

and with our rusting coat of arms
that everyday buys so many farms
we pamper, we coddle,
spoil our fears at full throttle
that smears the real with the fabric,
to the laymen terms for worms
to the speech of an enigmatic priest,
making my stomach churn, by both.
By both of them.

But like so many of my earthly
expansive family prefer the complex
simplicity breeding felicity
from the unfurled mystery of life
resonates as a deity.
I see her. I hear her

Like the silhouette of a beautiful suffragette
eaves dropping on her soliloquy
of how she views the world to be
with angelic scrutiny
that some try to follow, some lead
but I just want to kiss her cheek.
Is that so wrong?
(Joe Houck 10/23/09)

Keep flying to the sun with these gargoyle wings.
Joe Houck

tabme
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since 2008-10-03

Posts 37
Mississippi

1 posted 2008-10-24 07:13 AM

Good stuff.

Check out the band Why? Track: Good Friday off of their Alopecia album. I think you'll like it. Then realize that you're better than them.

things I like:

quote:
Colorless people
dancing around
as stale as the
served crumpets
to static trumpets
played by dead
colored jesters.
That are sequestered.

quote:

Dig some lent and flick it towards the skyyy
It wrestles with the pull of the world and
weightlessness of being trivial to divinity’s eye,

quote:

But like so many of my earthly
expansive family prefer the complex
simplicity breeding felicity
from the unfurled mystery of life
resonates as a deity.
I see her. I hear her

Like the silhouette of a beautiful suffragette
eaves dropping on her soliloquy
of how she views the world to be
with angelic scrutiny
that some try to follow, some lead
but I just want to kiss her cheek.
Is that so wrong?

you make me jealous.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

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2 posted 2008-10-24 10:43 AM

Gosh, you're no ordinary Joe! You are VERY talented! ~ Not only as a poet, but in your delivery of your words! You and they rock!

You have a fabulous voice and your timing with the music is impeccable! Outstanding job!

Congrats! ~ and a pat on the back!
Linda

Ceinwyn
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since 2000-07-09

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3 posted 2008-10-24 02:45 PM

wow...I'm with Linda on this one...

The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone.

Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 324
california

4 posted 2008-10-24 02:56 PM

tambe - Thanks for giving a listen and your complements. I'll check out Why, "good friday" for sure.

steavenr
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since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2008-10-24 03:25 PM

super-cool write...so many things to comment on
first, I vote for canonization
second, love your word choices
especially liked this phrase "simplicity breeding felicity"

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11

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6 posted 2008-10-24 03:45 PM

Joe Houck - congratulations on a write and music well accomplished, liked it a lot...

BC

tabme
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since 2008-10-03

Posts 37
Mississippi

7 posted 2008-10-24 08:02 PM

Yeah, the whole thing is genius.

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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since 2000-01-29

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8 posted 2008-10-25 03:44 AM

Joe... this is fantastic! I really enjoyed it.. you have a very sexy voice!

I think this might be a

love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Callista
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since 2008-10-05

Posts 63
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9 posted 2008-10-25 05:09 AM

Oh, Joe. There are so many reasons i am glad i found you on this Friday night. YOU delight me with your technological ability first. Then you wow me with your thoughts. Your vocabulary- to die for: "immortalized and canonized"! Your " smart-assed cynicism" gives me hope for the future of mankind. The phrase "displaced rapture" makes me FEEL after this mind-numbing week. Thank you.I joy in the workings of your mind.

"The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on: nor all thy Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line.."

Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 324
california

10 posted 2008-10-25 05:55 AM

Earth angel!

Words can’t describe how happy I am that you liked this. Through the encouragement of my roommates and friends.... and all of you at PIP =), I am compelled to make more of these. I know I don’t log on here as much as I should, but I appreciate everything you have ever said about my writing. you are my intangible internet muse. I have always loved your poems. Seeing that you like my words as well make me blissful.

Ps. I really like your voice in your poems as well.

Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23

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california

11 posted 2008-10-25 05:57 AM

thank you Ceinwyn,

i'm glad you liked my ramblings. =)

Joe Houck
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Posts 324
california

12 posted 2008-10-25 06:02 AM

steavenr-

Thank you so much for checkin this out.
I am also for canonization. With you reading/listening to this, you are canonizing this poem... Which I am in your debt. Thank you for the close read. =)

glad you liked it.

Joe Houck
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Posts 324
california

13 posted 2008-10-25 06:04 AM

thanks BC!

glad you enjoyed it.

Joe Houck
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Posts 324
california

14 posted 2008-10-25 06:11 AM

thank you Roniece!

I'm so delighted you liked this. I kinda did this on a whim, but comments like this make me want keep at it. I’ve always loved your poetry as well, which makes your endorsement of my own poems even greater. =) Thank you!

Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 324
california

15 posted 2008-10-25 06:20 AM

Callista-

holy hell, i'm blushing... =). Thank you for your kind critique. i'm very thankful you stumbled upon my poem.

and welcome to PIP =)

Keep flying to the sun with these gargoyle wings.
Joe Houck

Artic Wind
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16 posted 2008-10-25 09:17 PM

I heard some of your stuff! Excellent..... Nice poem to boot

ARCTIC WIND

Artic Wind
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17 posted 2008-10-25 09:24 PM

Oh and I forgot to mention! I wish that I had a lighter, you know, when people are at a concert waving the lighter~oouu I have always wanted to do that! **waving a lighter** LOL

Keep up the good poems and music with voice~
saving this**

ARCTIC WIND

tabme
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since 2008-10-03

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Mississippi

18 posted 2008-10-26 01:57 AM

You've introduced some of these people to rap. gj

Janette

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19 posted 2008-10-26 09:15 AM

WOW!

First I LISTENED to your recording, which by the way was excellent, but it went a bit too fast for me to truly comprehend.  So then I READ it.

I may have concluded incorrectly but ... I think this is a political poem.  How fun!

News commentators all caught up with their view of the world, ignoring other's views ... sleepless nights drinking and smoking in vein trying to independently figure it all out for yourself ... unhappy with the choices ... then "felicity," instant happiness ... and then - Sarah.

This is my first time really THINKING about rap, I have always kinda ignored it in the past, did not really listening to comprehend.

Did I even come close?

Oh!  And I did enjoy it, too.

Janette

always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same

tabme
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20 posted 2008-10-26 05:54 PM

Rap has much to offer. It's not all about tha female dogs and garden tools. Common, Atmosphere, Lupe fiasco, Fort Minor, and many others I could name if my Zune was at hand, all have great writers within their group.

The Roots
Gym Class Heroes (lead singer/rapper/writer is a bit conceited but good lyrics)

Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 324
california

21 posted 2008-10-26 07:06 PM

hey, Artic Wind. thanks for giving a listen and checking out my other songs as well...really appreciated.

I’ve waved a lighter at a concert before….i did it out jest at the time, but I admit it secretly felt fantastic. =)

Artic Wind
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22 posted 2008-10-26 07:08 PM

LOL That's what I thought it would feel like!

ARCTIC WIND

Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 324
california

23 posted 2008-10-26 07:11 PM

tabme - I agree, hip hop can be very lyric oriented. I can’t stand most mainstream rap right now. luckly there is a lot of great indi hip hop to choose from…if you know where to look. aesop rock, sage francis, and atmosphere are great.

Joe Houck
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since 2001-04-23

Posts 324
california

24 posted 2008-10-26 07:20 PM

Janette - Wow....wow wow. one great thing about poems is that you can interpret them through many lenses and still be right...but you pretty much infer nearly everything I was going for. I thought it would be read more as a lampoon-like pious poem (which it partly is as well) but I had “Sarah” in mind. =) I was going to title the poem "Sarah" or "Palin" or something, but i thought it would be trying to force people to read it like that. so happy you let me bend your ear and commented on this.

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