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Sky Rewind |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio 
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A revival of sorts from where clouds had stalled on the skyway to abundance given rise to corn growing straight up on its ladder of green in a flourish of opulence I filled baskets wild with flowers and drank of your moonshine though this milk colored morning finds your watered down kiss in a sky of rewind and your circles of rain drops left to die at their prime. [This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (07-18-2008 07:55 AM).] |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Heartbreak, it appears. And in such flourishing and descriptive language. Another great write! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Inkedgoddess, Your milk colored morn is an interesting concept, as is the rest of the poem. Love Bobby |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You do have a natural way with nature, lovie. I adore that first stanza, even though it didn't play out as expected...(but I like surprise endings too) check your Pipmail!  |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Sometimes, we sip of the milk colored morning, and realize that it was the journey, not the destination that really was most filling. i really liked this one. keeper ;0 |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Beautiful penned... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Especially enjoyed the first stanza...brilliant description...of course the rest wasn't too shabby either... much enjoyed this.. j. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
A revival of sorts from where clouds had stalled ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Love that, love your title, love your poem, love the way you spike your work. Nice going good goddess~ |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I like the watered down kiss line a lot, actually, because I've given and received a lot of those.... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
in a flourish of opulence I filled baskets wild with flowers and drank of your moonshine Your "sky rewind" is written in an extremely captivating way, dear Michele. Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Michele, this "sky rewind" is another fine example of your classic Goddess writing.  With love, Linda  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
thank you all for stopping by  |
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