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Open Poetry #43
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Huan Yi
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Waukegan
0 posted 2008-10-08 01:07 PM

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A night bird
Calls outside
The bedroom
Window

Through which
As we rest
In each other’s
Shadow
We can see
A river of stars

In moonlight
Fading now
You will go
Until again
It is time
To dream

And with the dew
Still left at dawn
On autumn leaves
I will write your name


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secondhanddreampoet
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1 posted 2008-10-08 02:31 PM

The end of this 'write' is especially grand-fine:

"In moonlight
Fading now
You will go
Until again
It is time
To dream

And with the dew
Still left at dawn
On autumn leaves
I will write your name"

serious and sustained applause!!
Midnitesun
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Gaia
2 posted 2008-10-08 03:44 PM

A fine romantic write, with fine imagery and 'tight' lines.
1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
3 posted 2008-10-08 05:41 PM

sigh
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