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Open Poetry #43

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Huan Yi
Member Ascendant

since 2004-10-12

Posts 6688
Waukegan

0 posted 2008-10-08 01:07 PM

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A night bird
Calls outside
The bedroom
Window

Through which
As we rest
In each other’s
Shadow
We can see
A river of stars

In moonlight
Fading now
You will go
Until again
It is time
To dream

And with the dew
Still left at dawn
On autumn leaves
I will write your name

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secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

1 posted 2008-10-08 02:31 PM

The end of this 'write' is especially grand-fine:

"In moonlight
Fading now
You will go
Until again
It is time
To dream

And with the dew
Still left at dawn
On autumn leaves
I will write your name"

serious and sustained applause!!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2008-10-08 03:44 PM

A fine romantic write, with fine imagery and 'tight' lines.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

3 posted 2008-10-08 05:41 PM

sigh

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