Open Poetry #43 |
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Lost Love |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! ![]() |
Lost Love Outside this lonely room, (where one last candle weeps tears for lost love) an inscrutable Autumn moon rises over sleeping hills while here within, memory reigns …the cruelest master… your form dancing in fading twilight mirrors; your voice whispering with a weary west wind; (winters transient harbinger of ten thousand sorrows) your face etched in star-field splendor... as celestial epiphany to all that shall never be. --- b. e. adams (9/27/08) |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"your voice whispering with a weary west wind; (winters transient harbinger of ten thousand sorrows)" I hear a wailing wind in the background. That's far too many sorrows for one spirit to bear. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Both exquisite and heartbreaking! long winded, heavy sigh~ |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Secondhanddreampoet, This is well written. Snap out of it, and look to the future with hope. You never know what might turn up. Bobby |
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Alison![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Bruce, Yes, the wind softly wails through your words and it weeps too. Beautiful writing, my friend. Simply beautiful. Alison |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I think this is, maybe, the best poem on lost love I ever read, Bruce. Ida |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Bruce I read this one with loud voice and enjoyed it, it is very musical and worth the reading....Thank you for the very good poem.... yann |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
"your face etched in star-field splendor... as celestial epiphany to all that shall never be." ah poet how this speaks to me |
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ArtSolstice Member
since 2007-03-18
Posts 498 |
This poem draws my mind to Eliot's Burnt Norton, a work you know well, Poet. I enjoyed reading your poem, then the first part of Burnt Norton http://www.tristan.icom43.net/quartets/norton.html . Ah, longing ... and memory ... |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
lots of good stuff here...nicely done |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Bruce~ I read you and I smile, I read you and I weep ... I caress your words gently and feel that they belong to me~ ![]() Thank you ... oh, thank you~ *Huglets* ![]() ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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