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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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She placed a scarf around her neck, trying several styles of knots. Her shaking hand held a lipstick something she had found in the thrift-store purse she bought at fifty cents on a discount last Tuesday's senior citizen day for old folk to get out... She smiled revealing fuschia flecks on her yellow teeth. She winced at sparce and brittle hair not quite gray but colorless and touched her fragile paper skin before she smeared two dots on it-- a memory of blush. She took a tissue from the box and then she wiped the lipstick off as she wet the metal comb and patted her unrulies down before she took the orange scarf and placed it where her pride once was upon her head in auburn's place it used to bounce and frame her face... When she was young, she owned the name now she simply prayed for days her emerald eyes could see again-- and today was one of them-- she touched the mirror and she thought: "I wish that it were not." |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
You've painted a wonderfully sensitive portrait with absolute grace, lady Serenity. Take a bow, lovie. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
aw, Kace.  Some days I wish I hadn't put down my charcoals and chalks--I think people are just so beautiful and fascinating. It's such a great sadness to me when they don't see themselves that way. *smile* I meant to write something seasonal. Maybe I did. Thanks for reading, lovie.  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
It is a good thing I have a printer, because if I waited for you to put all these folks in "book form" I would sure miss out. I have created my own book and added Grace to it. This was brilliant! |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
We all have seasons. We seem to cherish springtime the most. Autumn years though, are when we get to remember and when we have the most to remember. beautiful poem. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thanks Shar, WT. I love Grace. I hope ya'll do too, now. |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
"Grace" is a treasure, so insightful and real. I am keeping this one. Why did I know there was an artist in there somewhere? Ida |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
quote: Goodness, dear Karen, you have moved me to tears with Grace! You have captured the very soul here ... Wonderful write. Love and hugs. Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
It is a pity, i think, as folks get older, their confidence fades as does their memory of why they had once had the confidence. perhaps grace is an aquired skill to replace ego. Loved the way you put this together, Serenity! |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Karen, charcoals and chalks, or no charcoals and chalks, you painted the grace of Grace with your words, your compassion, your sensitive observation, your insight, your intelligence and your wisdom. Your response just after it, was a poem, a prayer, a painting of just who you are and why we all love you so much. - Owl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You folks are so seriously lovely. I tried to stop writing...I wanted to write the fancy stuff, and I just couldn't. My head doesn't work that way. So I thought I should just stop the pretense, and give it up. The problem was, though, that I felt rather dead inside and I missed it. And I know this ain't "sniffy" artistic poetry--I can list twenty things wrong with this poem at a glance. But if I can repay the kindnesses you all have shown me by just making you smile, or think, then that's okay by me, if it's okay with ya'll. Thanks so much for reading "Grace". I was gonna try to "fix" her up, but I decided that would be a bit hypocritical after telling her she was just lovely the way that she is.  I love you folks. |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
far as I can see tell is the fancy stuff Karen I love the way your head works |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Charcoals and chalks or pen and paper... the result is the same - a vivid painting the touches anyone lucky enough to see. Beautiful! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
k~ 'she was just lovely the way that she is.' Yes ... and you word-scaped her just beautifully ... yes you did~ Thank you for the 'eye' to see her and others through the beauty of your Spiritual Soul ..~  *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
real gritty for the not so pretty Grace feeling her pain cause im so vain like Grace cant stand to see my own aging parts lately thanks for bringing her out |
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latearrival Member Ascendant
since 2003-03-21
Posts 5499Florida |
Serenity, I know your Grace...her name is Mary. A truly remakable lady who has never ever admitted her true age. She worked here until she was well into her mid eighties and tried to pass herself as under 65, refusing to admit she received a monthly social security check. She had three different ages on her work papers and was finally asked to choose one for the records. . You wrote her beautifully. "Late" |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I thought I had responded to this one... May we all be blessed with Grace[s] in our midst. |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
I have read this several times since you posted. This is so touching..showing the frailty and beauty of Grace. This really is exceptional. |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
this is one of those rare pleasures when words transform themselves into such visual presentations that you cannot help (as the reader) to be awed by them...loved this phrase: "she took the orange scarf and placed it where her pride once was" such an enjoyable read |
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Callista Member
since 2008-10-05
Posts 63USA |
This is understated and most powerful because of that. "When she was young, she owned the name.." (I wish I had written that line.) I think she still owns the name. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smile* thank you all so very much Love to all, and especially to Grace. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I shall bump this to the top so more people can meet Grace  The only time we waste is the time we spend thinking we are alone. |
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Edward Grim Senior Member
since 2005-12-18
Posts 1154Greenville, South Carolina |
Brava! Brava! Bump in the night. Sniff the glove? Hmm, curious... "Imagination is more important than knowledge." Albert E. |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
"not quite gray but colorless" You have painted Grace with a wealth of color, adding deep hues of dimension. A truly enjoyable read! Janette always seeking joy, adventure and romance and wishing you find the same |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*smiles* I wanted to say thanks yet again, but confess I came back to give E.G.--Edward Grim--special hugs and an explantion. "sniff the glove" was the name of the album in the movie that parodied rock stars--"This is Spinal Tap". I replaced the critique message with that because it gives me some wry amusement. It's good to see ya Ed. A bump in the night beats a lump in the night any time.   Unworthy of you all. |
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