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it seems you know everything?
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it seems you know everything? |
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NormalitxButterfly Member
since 2008-07-09
Posts 107 |
until your ready to listen i wont say a word it seems you know everything? talkin for a while it seems were better but that's no excuse for today can we drop everything and start it all over would you like to forget the most you can do is blame me it seems you know everything? you say it takes two that we both have to try but your the one that's playing games and keeping score there's so much id like to say to you but i wont say a word there's no point until your ready to listen i don't think you know what your missing i keep hoping somehow we'll find each other again im ready to give up but that's ok right it seems you know everything? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"but i wont say a word" Your critique flag asks me to be honest. Honestly, I think you should say "a word" or maybe fifty.  This feels stilted because you are holding back a bad-ass spanking. Spank us.   |
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