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Open Poetry #43

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poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

0 posted 2008-09-20 08:48 AM

Ash

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The face of fall is ash.
Feverish leaves saunter
here and there, to and fro.
Like a bright cobweb caught
in sun, a few lovers
twinkle on lonely benches.

Apart from these colors
the face of fall is ash.
The coiled desires
are static in their
own unfulfillment. Sleep.
Every street is dead part,
sleepy absolution
of ash, burnt, dead Pompeii. © 2008 - All Rights Reserved Kushal Poddar

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Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-09-20 08:58 AM

Wow, dear Ku, the comparison to Pompeii! Desolate, yet with such colorful treasures and memories, as the ones that are imprinted in the lifeless falling leaves ...

Melancholically beautiful!

Love and hugs.
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-09-20 11:44 AM

Yo Poddarku,

This is a good simile for fall.

Bobby

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

3 posted 2008-09-20 01:21 PM

Lovely, Kushal. I certainly picked up the ambiance from your effective words. Yes,Pompeii must have felt very burnt, full of ash and eerily lifeless just after the eruption.

- Owl

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