Open Poetry #43 |
last train to rosary hill |
Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
I always wanted to be a stranger on a train and have you playing in my eyes nonchalantly with mischief and hemlines that we won't talk about as you would read a book upside down and ask me later to take a picture of you for you to send to a lover there so he or she would know you were thinking and wanting to do things while riding and would I mind taking a few more then sometimes my mind drifts elsewhere and I don't bother pulling it back to the proper safety of one of my pockets and you know how children are when alone without some guidance to keep them in line you say you love the boy of my mind when he plays with chrome and glass and wonders where it came from and where he could hide it and than find it again perhaps tomorrow when we pretended we were trained strangers __________________ daark (white stone) |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Totally awesome, dear D.! Train stories are fascinating, full of glances and secrets, and they make the ride too often seem too short ... Wonderfully fitting into the others of the white stone series. Love, Margherita "Love is the One who masters all things; |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
"trained strangers", interesting turn on the words...nice work |
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AAB Member
since 2008-04-10
Posts 99Canada |
I like it. 'trained strangers' clever. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
friend steavenar thanks guy _________________ ms aab, thanks for the read |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
the zipless .... mmm mmm... mmmhmmm.. yeah. There's really only so much one can say without actually saying it. yanno? |
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The Lady Member Rara Avis
since 2005-12-26
Posts 7634The Southwest |
Karen is right stranger darlin' the zipless... and the boy of your mind shall never be trained |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms serene...thanks babe!! __________________ ms ladyone..thank you for looking in...the boy of me smiles |
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Pilgrimage Member Elite
since 2001-12-04
Posts 3945Texas, USA |
I like the way you use language. It probably complains later to its mother. Nan (Pilgrim variety) |
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WTBAKELAR
since 2008-09-09
Posts 1089Utah, USA |
I get it, I like it, put me on the Zepher, I'm in Training. |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Daark, Whoa! Had to pull myself back in to type out a response. Once there was this train ... anyway, thanks for making me remember. I love how your poetry takes me down a path. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms nan...thanks so much for the touch _____________ wt, thank you for the read and comments __________________ ms ali-san, thanks little one for the read and ride |
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