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steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

0 posted 2008-09-19 02:06 PM

desires simmer like sullen whispers on a sweat-soaked neck
affections boiling over in steam-laden pots of the soul
clouds of confusion meander through the mind
distracting the senses with auras of attraction

murmuring in motion, stuttering in silence
the heart rambles through the brambles
of commitment, contentment, contemplation

earning itself the mantra of make-believe
fantasy exercising fortuitously

leaving the mind to the lacework of surrender

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

1 posted 2008-09-19 03:45 PM

the heart rambles through the brambles
of commitment, contentment, contemplation

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Such a wonderful weave of words.

Love this, steavenr~

WTBAKELAR

Senior Member

since 2008-09-09

Posts 1089
Utah, USA

2 posted 2008-09-19 04:02 PM

What a great explaination of Lust. (Can we say that?) Beautiful poem.

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2008-09-19 04:15 PM

'weave of words' oooohh, I like that. Thanks, Blues

Thanks, WT, and to answer your question...yes, we can.

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

4 posted 2008-09-19 08:30 PM

Awesome!
I couldn't pick a favorite line...especially liked each one and all.

So glad to read you again. Welcome home.

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

5 posted 2008-09-20 08:42 AM

A most captivating write, an intense crescendo of feelings!

Love,
Margherita

"Love is the One who masters all things;
I am mastered totally by Love."
(Rumi)

RMW
Senior Member

since 2001-03-21

Posts 1424

6 posted 2008-09-20 10:41 AM

"The lacework of surrender." Excellent. Bob

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

7 posted 2008-09-20 03:18 PM

TD,
thank you...always a high compliment when you comment...thank you for taking your time to read it

Margherita,
appreciate your very kind remarks, nice of you to read and comment...your graciousness means a lot

Bob,
thanks...interestingly it (the write, i.e.) almost went a different direction, but afterwards it was the genesis for that title...appreciate your comments

AAB
Member

since 2008-04-10

Posts 99
Canada

8 posted 2008-09-20 04:23 PM

wonderfull, as your work usually is. the title is just as brilliant as the rest of the poem.

"Death cannot stop true love, all it can do is delay it for a while" The Princess Bride

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

9 posted 2008-09-20 10:34 PM

Fabulous...James

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

10 posted 2008-09-21 12:30 PM

AAB,
thank you for your humbling comments...appreciated you reading and taking the time to be so generous

James,
truly and remarkably appreciative for your kind thoughts...thank you

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