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A Beautiful Disaster
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since 2007-01-13

Posts 409

0 posted 2008-09-13 07:52 AM

Dissolve all your pride in your misery, guys!
It's only your pathos that shines in your eyes.
Your words are important just devil knows where,
Your mirth in the voice is a sign of despair.
You've never seen life, as you've been colorblind;
It's painted by poets in all undertones
While you label things just as black or as white.
Your black is opposed to the world of your own.
If difference frightens you, you're the crowd,
There's nothing your hopeless days are about.
You're models of somebody's system, you're clones,
You're always together, forever alone.

The crowd is such a deceptive protection,
The crowd is moving in just one direction.
It's moving nowhere, the speed's minus zero.
It's our tomorrow's exceptional hero!

The sun in your world still can warm you at night,
But nothing will ever be f---ing all right!
Work, family, pub, sleep... Then count to ten -
You'll see the same picture again and again.
You can't change the rules, so you change decorations,
You're frightened of getting to your one true core.
You, slaves, could be kings - you are human creations,
By concept a bit of a muse and a wh---,
A thinker, a painter, a soul to admire
As well as a wreck, a destroyer, a liar,
An actor sometimes, or the truth with a guile -
Still better than your hypocritical smile!
Your credo is envy, the reason you fail.
Our world is a pedestal, yours is a jail.

The crowd is such a deceptive protection,
The crowd is moving in just one direction.
It's moving nowhere, the speed's minus zero.
It's our tomorrow's exceptional hero!
Is it?

RevengeIsMine
Senior Member

since 2006-07-08

Posts 820
Australia

1 posted 2008-09-13 07:54 AM

Hmm this poem makes me think.. i really really really like it.. Well done!

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

2 posted 2008-09-13 11:18 AM

Deep and thought provoking and rhythic too

TheAnonDavid
Member

since 2008-08-28

Posts 237
UK

3 posted 2008-09-13 03:05 PM

This poem opens up a train of thoughts.
In a number of your poems you indicate certain words by dashes.
My own view is; if the poem needs the word it needs it. If the words are only there to create 'shock value' then the words and indeed the whole poem are pointless. If the rules or conventions are that such words are banned, then don't do half measures. Find a site where you can say what you want to without self censorship.
Sorry, personal thoughts ended.

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Dylan Thomas

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