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Escapades |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
(here's an epic I've been stuck on for half a year, finally finished. Seems like it's half song and half poem, sorta like a soem...or pong..wait..posong? ah, whatever..) Escapades Black Monday finds the moon's glow climbing the fire escapes and the streets go on dreaming without me A curious grey covers me head to toe elegant introverted escapades her fingers dug in me for meaning there's nothing to see My heart takes in her smile a scenic country mile I wanna follow that feeling down put it in my pocket a funhouse mirror of my frown Ruby Tuesday unwinds like a carousel broken busted horses die and the lovers are lost in reverie but not me Words can't say the foggy feelings to dispel thunder rolls the rain from her eyes snaring in my lonesome idiot jubilee shake the leaves off my tree My bones feel the winter as always I lose then win her flippin' through the rerun of days tryin' to find a little moon in a vast yellow sea of suns Blue December falls like a ghost train pouring out of the clouds as I dive off her eyelashes and splash into her teary puddles of sky Back to Monday I'm covered up in teary rain climbing my arms and shoulders and the black night's embers they smolder within me Within this frame of tender and tame escapades she sees only the moon in me I feel only the sun inside her and the streets they go on dreaming of love without me without me "How do the angels get to sleep, when the devil leaves the porchlight on?" -- Tom Waits, 'Mr. Siegal' |
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exhale Senior Member
since 2003-06-13
Posts 646Alberta,Canada |
This was wonderful. There was definitely a bit of song to it, and it worked. pong...hehe |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Well, I was a songwriter before I ever touched a poetic pen. This is EXTREMELY songish.. ly.  ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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threadbear Senior Member
since 2008-07-10
Posts 817Indy |
I see it as a song since it has such a great rhythm to the cadence. Very well done, SD tb |
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