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WindWalker
Senior Member

since 2001-10-12

Posts 1218

0 posted 2008-09-05 09:03 PM

The Hitch Hiker

I can quite imagine her,
standing on the road side, defiantly
smiling, slim arm stretched out, thumb up,
lips pursed as if saying: “Hey, it’s my life!
If you don’t like it, get out of my way!”—
scorn for common sense darting
from flashing black eyes,
flowing hair blown back thickly
as trucks rumble past.

Defiant, she would have been
yet as vulnerable to evil
as she was beautiful, daring, unwise.
I drove into the city early this morning—
the road as empty as the desert.
No startling youthful mirage
appeared standing on the highway,
only the sun, sand and burning asphalt
linked ones thoughts with the horizon...
At breakfast, I scanned the morning papers
for any news of one little fool.
I heard some talk in the truck stop:
some who saw her yesterday
(who could forget the sight?)
admitted they had been afraid
of complications if they stopped—
so they knew no more than I.

No news is good news, they say:
guess I’ll book a room at Motel 6
park my rig, rent a car and tonight
I’ll go look about the streets
for a raven-haired rebel in mini-skirt
plying her trade along the boulevards.
Maybe one more time lucky... or not
I’ll find her there again.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-09-05 09:50 PM

Yo WindWalker,

See that, you should have given the kid a ride last night. Regrets--regrets--regrets!

Bobby

poddarku
Senior Member

since 2008-01-15

Posts 589
india

2 posted 2008-09-06 12:14 PM

now here is a complete poem. wonderful

ArtSolstice
Member

since 2007-03-18

Posts 498

3 posted 2008-09-06 11:31 AM

What a fine poem and character study, both of the subject and the writer! Greatly enjoyed -- congratulations on another of many superb writes, WW.

Bonnie j
Senior Member

since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

4 posted 2008-09-06 12:42 PM

Keep going and make this into a mystery.
The plot thickens as the young girl stands on the side of the road as the sun begins to set.A car moving slowly down the darkened highway looking, looking for the girl with the raven hair.
Good jobber
Hugs
BonBon

secondhanddreampoet
Member Ascendant

since 2006-11-07

Posts 6394
a 'Universalist' !

5 posted 2008-09-06 12:59 PM

This author is one grand-fine talent!

very serious and long-sustained
applause for this excellent 'penning'!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

6 posted 2008-09-08 07:25 PM

Enjoyed...James

Newpoet
Member

since 2008-05-16

Posts 72

7 posted 2008-09-08 09:33 PM

This is a really enjoyable poem for me. It's one of my favorites on this site so far. It tells a strong story with vivid images and is creative at the same time.

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

8 posted 2008-09-09 12:20 PM

This is a bit of a surprise, WW. Different from your usual writing but excellent as always,
Ida

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