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TheAnonDavid
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since 2008-08-28

Posts 237
UK

0 posted 2008-09-05 06:36 AM

O'er woods and hills the cries were heard
Of sorrow and torment.
They froze the blood and chilled the heart -
'Twas Madeleine's lament.

The skylarks in the dark'ning sky
Made not a single noise
And all across the peaceful earth
Could not be heard a voice.

All living things like statues stood,
The trees ne'er stirred nor bent,
And silence reigned o'er all the land -
Save Madeleine's lament.

And all who heard were moved to tears,
From earth to sky above,
For ev'ry creature understood
She'd lost her one true love.

She gave her heart so selflessly
And now that love was spent.
The one true love had not been true -
Hence Madeleine's lament.

He stole her heart and stole her love,
He stole her kisses too.
He told her they would never part,
Alas! That was untrue!

The words he spoke were black and false
He said not what he meant
And when he left he could not hear
Sweet Madeleine's lament.

When Venus heard the sorry tale
To Madeleine she flew.
'Twas far too late to save the love
And this the Goddess knew.

As Venus found the sobbing maid
And made her soft descent
Her heart was moved like ne'er before
By Madeleine's lament.

She could not save the dying love
But Venus knew a way
To make false lovers ever true
And never more to stray.

She took the shining tears and placed
Them in the firmament.
So search the sky, you don't see stars -
It's Madeleine's lament.

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Dylan Thomas

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

1 posted 2008-09-05 04:40 PM

Wonderful write and really great rhyming, flowing softly. You succeeded in permeating this tale with a harmonious tune.

Love,
Margherita

TinaTrivett
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since 2006-07-15

Posts 569

2 posted 2008-09-06 10:28 AM

Your poems are out of another time...beautiful.

Bonnie j
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since 2003-06-27

Posts 1588
Ohio

3 posted 2008-09-06 11:19 AM

What a sad and lovely lament you have here.
Maybe the rain tear drops from heaven.
Good work fellow poet.
Hugs
BonBon

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

4 posted 2008-09-06 12:54 PM

You held me enthralled every tear of the way.

- Owl

TheAnonDavid
Member

since 2008-08-28

Posts 237
UK

5 posted 2008-09-06 02:13 PM

Thank you to you all.
I realise that my poetry may belong to another era but I am pleased that some of you are prepared to indulge me.

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Dylan Thomas

Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21

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In the winds of Cherokee song

6 posted 2008-09-06 03:15 PM

Excellent cadence and flow in this work. A very enjoyable piece to read in structure and content alike.

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

Posts 5496
Forever In Your Heart

7 posted 2008-09-06 03:45 PM

I realise that my poetry may belong to another era

Well I for one, speaking for myself, I write sometimes from the time you speak of as well,
nice to see a kindred spirit!

I really appreciate this poem, have you ever seen the movie with Qweneth Paltrow about two poets, one is from England, the other from America and they are reasearching the poets of old in England and fall in love, finding love poems that have never been written, or viewed by the public before, locked in an old chest. I believe the movie is called Possession~

The past will connect them. The passion will possess them.
Plot:
A pair of literary sleuths unearth the amorous secret of two Victorian poets only to find themselves falling under a passionate spell.

http://www.imdb.com/video/screenplay/vi3936092441/

Link to a preview of the movie!

OwlSA
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since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

8 posted 2008-09-06 03:52 PM

I 'aint indulging you. I am just plain enjoying your poetry.

- Owl

TheAnonDavid
Member

since 2008-08-28

Posts 237
UK

9 posted 2008-09-06 04:10 PM

A Romantic Heart
Thank you - I will look out for the dvd.

OwlSA
Thank you

Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
Dylan Thomas

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

10 posted 2008-09-06 05:13 PM

enjoyed

Joyce Johnson

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Washington State

11 posted 2008-09-06 10:57 PM

I very much enjoy your work. I love old English poets and poetry. Joyce

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

12 posted 2008-09-07 08:16 PM

This was my first read of your work but won't be the last!

Alison

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Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

13 posted 2008-09-08 02:10 AM

Every poem holds me spellbound.

A

sklagurl17
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14 posted 2008-09-08 03:36 AM

Word can't explain how much I love your poems.

TheAnonDavid
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since 2008-08-28

Posts 237
UK

15 posted 2008-09-08 01:41 PM

It is so heart-warming to receive such encouraging comments. My thanks to you all.

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