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I will forget you
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I will forget you |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams 
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I will forget you We were never lovers As I was never loved Your arms had disappeared As there was no more warmth My heart is now weighted Though suddenly empty I'm Small and dense like lead My room keeps no flowers It reminds me of fate Instead I grow ivy As I watch it never die -Juju -"So you found a girl Who thinks really deep thougts What's so amazing about really deep thoughts " Silent all these Years, Tori Amos [This message has been edited by Juju (03-03-2008 06:57 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
funny how some people make you forget real quick  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Instead I grow ivy And I watch it never die... that's the thing about ivy that I like, it is very hardy M |
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LadyTom Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 353LA, CA |
Very good. A very calm mind for life. enjoyed. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
It's Been awhile since your last poem! Well written Juju ARCTIC WIND |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Juju, This is pretty good. I like the last two lines. I'd get rid of some of the "And"s starting sentences, and lines. Bobby |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
Thankyou every one, and Jordan your correct. I was being lazy. I will fix it later tonight. -Juju |
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