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White Horse |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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White Horse Slate skies spreading wide and gray, air so still and chill, while gentle, loving thoughts of you come slipping in brandywine warm, I find so weak my will, knowing somewhere far away, a White Horse roams and this silence lays me open lifting up a soul's deep moan while others only hear the wind. Caution cautions one to dwell between a forest’s span of pine and eucalyptus air, where a hushed spell is held, willing prisoner knowing somewhere there are skies so blue and clear, while in misty imagery, this White Horse leads me straight to you And summer is where your own heart lives in such dream-like state so envisage, if you would, what this imagination lovingly creates. White Horse knows this heart. " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
Stunning write k...I love this! |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
Pure song of spring. so beautiful and romantic. Every word is a drop of spring rain. Beautiful dear lady. Precious writing!! And I don't know when I can write like this. I could see that a pen was dancing elegantly on the paper. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sissie "while others only hear the wind."  |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
where a hushed spell is held, willing prisoner... Sunshine- What a wonderful line in a great outpouring of emotion. Indigo |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
A fantastic write, Karilea! You are a wonderful writer. I so enjoyed your book. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
You have woven your thoughts into words so finely...a pleasure to read...James |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
I really like this gal!!!!..... |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
This is most fine!... I am particularly fond of imagery such as: “Slate skies spreading wide”; “loving thoughts … slipping in brandywine warm”; “knowing somewhere far away, a White Horse roams”; “a forest’s span of pine and eucalyptus air”; “summer is where your own heart lives” Serious applause!! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Sunshine, This seems to consist of two rather long, rambling sentences, and one shorter sentence. I'd think of doing something with those two long sentences. That would make this easier to read, and understand. Bobby |
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Oklahoma Rose Senior Member
since 2008-02-28
Posts 1586Oklahoma USA |
I really enjoyed reading your beautiful poetry. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Music to my ears, dear Karilea! love Margherita  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"a White Horse roams and this silence lays me open lifting up a soul's deep moan while others only hear the wind." ~ Smiling, nodding ~ and understanding...  "so envisage, if you would, what this imagination lovingly creates." ~ I'm envisaging, with the help your exquisite poetry! Love & Sun Light, Linda |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
This, I love, Sunshine. I love this. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Beautiful imagery! An inspired write... My heart, like the White Horse carries me to you. Hugs, Robert |
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LadyTom Member
since 2008-02-29
Posts 353LA, CA |
This poem has been in my mind esp before my sleep for several days. Tully a wonderful one. |
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