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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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it will be your eyes today that I will feel on my whispers like cellophane over a velvet river I will watch your mouth move letting words slip from your tongue like a kiss in flight between lovers my arms will wear your waist edges from the window of a lucky place dream and you will breath, please continue songs there will be no tomorrow in our moment none will be needed for our ending just our beginning will be enough of heaven frozen in a momentary, willing to want to ____________ daark |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"my arms will wear your waist edges from the window of a lucky place dream and you will breath, please continue songs" I think this is my favorite of yours now, D... sensitively expressed~~ M |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Maureen picked my favorite stanza as well... just lovely, Sir. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"there will be no tomorrow in our moment none will be needed for our ending just our beginning will be enough of heaven" this was my favorite part...  |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
everything is at the right moment!!! |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
D- I totally agree with Sea about the 'favorite part'... of your poem, I mean. ;-) Indigo |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Your words are like well cut diamonds, they sparkle and bring color into life. love Margherita |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
One of your most beautiful writes D. It made me smile,and I really needed that today.  |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
ok, I am starting my day off to a beautiful start Mr Daark... I have read you well... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
oh, I forgot to tag this one - just beautiful! Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Enjoyed the write! ARCTIC WIND |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms MMs, thank you hon, a pleasure to make you smile. _________________ ms sun, thank you lady friend for letting me know you here. ________________ ms suesea, thanks babe for reading and smiling ___________________ TomMark, thank you amigo for the read ________________ ms indi, thank you for the "part" you enjoy favoring. __________________ ms mar, thanks lady friend for your eyes __________________ ms gs, thank you donna for touching this one ___________________ ms r & b, thank you hon, and thank you again _______________ a&w, thank you so much for your read and comments |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
D You create beautiful really well. A |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms ali-san, you make me smile too thank you |
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