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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
The snow drifts between branches brown, Each touch lightens them to white, Yet most descends further down As their bits slowly fills up the night; Softly. Street lights cast themselves in dark Illuminating flakes as the pass by To the benches and tables of the park, The ground takes the color of the sky; Softly. She wanders midst the snow all alone Barely seeing the beauty of the winter, Yet all outdoors has become her home For she has no door for her to enter; Softly. Cardboard covers and a blanket of snow Beside a steam vent of an old factory Is the only warmth this night will show, Will there come a dream for else to be; Softly. Morning brings workers on their rounds In heavy jackets and frosty breath They find her prone upon the cold ground Where to her dreams came with death; Softly. Gloom |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
The snow drifts between branches brown, Each touch lightens them to white, Yet most descends further down As their bits slowly fills up the night; Softly..." Great start to this well written post!  I enjoyed post Gloom ARCTIC WIND |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Touching and well written but so very sad. Does what a poem should do. Ida |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
v. powerfully emotive write... [also a most timely and grandly important 'social impact/conscience' penning... would that America (particularly the 'rich and infamous' and the political 'powers that be') was listening!] serious, long-sustained applause!! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A softly written piece depicting the truths of life. Always, a pleasure to read your words Proff. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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Falling rain
since 2008-01-31
Posts 2178Small town, Illinois |
hmm interesting peice of work. not my favorite but its all-ight. ~Zach~ |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Artic Wind, Pleased you enjoyed. Thank you, Marchmadness, For the kind words. Thank you, secondhanddreampoet, For the praise. Thank you, Gentle Spirit, Always a pleasure to please you. Thank you, JamesMichael, For taking the time to read and respond. Thank you, Falling Rain, I am often not the favorite, But that you’ll take the time to read Is enough for me. Gloom |
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MJ Member
since 2008-02-21
Posts 60 |
Beautifully written. This left me hoping she could finally feel the softness. |
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