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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you 
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 I watched the gypsies dance for you by the glow of campfire a backdrop of midnight stars and wagons in semi circle I was shyer than I should have been given the company… but I was never one for crowds or competition, so I quietly watched envious at their lack of demure and flustered by my clumsiness ~ I could never move that way…. I listened to the music pretending your eyes didn’t trace curves and wished only for your eyes to hold me the same way…. knowing damn well, they never would… ~SEA~ |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
how beautiful...how sad and thinking that there are eyes on you! Hugs, Robert |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Perhaps you need new eyes SEA. Two pair. Beautiful picture Is that your work? Ida |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Wonderful work here. K "Nothing is impossible. Some things are just less likely than others." Jonathan Winters |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Believe in yourself...James |
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Indigo Senior Member
since 2001-05-17
Posts 602 |
it is often shy that catches the eye of night when the loud dies down. Envy doesn't become you, Sea... your tranquil waters are what make you... YOU! :-) Indigo |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
AhSweetSEA~ I know for a fact that those Gypsy gals have got NOTHING on you~ Some can dance ... but they can't hold a quill to the talents of a poetess of your caliber~ LOVE IT~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~ |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is a very well written, passionate write. But gypsy eyes of fire won't last past dawn, when your eyes will rise and touch his heart with the purity of morning glow ... love Margherita  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
outstanding, reading you is always such a joy very nice seeing you hugs Lee J. |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
interesting 'write!' I'd love to see those gypsies dancing against that "backdrop of stars and wagons!" Applause!! |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
SEA, There used to be a group of Gypsies that would sing and dance for money on Kensington Avenue here in the hood. They were very good, a wonderful memory your poem has brought back to me. Bobby |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms suesea, perhaps the eyes of the shy one are where the gypsy looks more often than you think? enjoyed this one ms...indi is right with her comment |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Don't under estimate your self SEA, I'm sure you shine in other ways for we are all different. When we are lacking in one attribute we nearly always make up for it in other ways and I'm sure you do. God Bless. Lindsay |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
but I was never one for crowds or competition, so I quietly watched envious at their lack of demure and flustered by my clumsiness ~ I could never move that way…. ~*~ And all the rest of it... WOW, and well done! Smiling here, at how far you've come. |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
I understand you here, I have never been one to seek the center, feeling that everytime I tried to be there, I would lose my nerve, make a fool of myself. You wrote me well here. Shyness and lack of confidence diminished my ability to do even those things I do well. My self-imposed "therapy" was to sing on stage in front of my entire high school at least twice a year, even as my knees melted under me and my heart felt like cement in my throat. If I had never tried, I would have had a mountain of regrets. Sometimes you have to crack the shell from the inside. - Or you risk living your life and looking at the whole world through the green eyes of envy. Sherry |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 gawdthis aches so much to my liking |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Feeling the ache in this one hon, but gotta tell ya, them gypsies, they got nothing on you sweetie.  Whats say we start our own bon fire and dance in the moonlight huh, with no one watchin but the stars and sky. All inhibitions left behind yes?? HUGS |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
Sea your soul moves like water a heart that trickles down the very face of an angel eyes that make stars drown you are the Luna’s shimmer precious sister to mother earth your tears do not go unnoticed the wind sings your worth |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I'll watch you like that!  "...lack of demure" I like that. This is sad, yet somehow sweet - it's hard not to appreciate writing that speaks of true feelings and wishes, especially knowing that the realization of those wishes would rarely live up to expectations.  |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Robert~ thank you Ida~ nope not mine but loved it thanksKrista~ thank you! James~ thank you, I do for the most part Indigo~ you are right, it doesn’t…thank you Marge~ love you lady Margherita~ thank you LeeJ~ thank you Bruce~ you make me smile, thank you Bobby~ I bet they were amazing to watch! D~ thanks and yes, she is… Lindsay~ that was so nice, thank you for that… Kari~ you know that means the world to me…thank you!! Sherry~ that’s cool that you did that even though you were scared. I’ve done stuff like that too, but the spotlight, is not for me…thank you Dixie~ thank you… Donna~ aww, thank you… Slick one~ that is by far, the nicest reply…ever… Kissy Face~ I don’t think I’d be that shy with you mister... you rock…. |
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LynnFromCT Member
since 2008-02-18
Posts 53CT, USA |
you may be shy, but your writing is awesome. I could picture myself, on the sidelines watching the woman/girl who believed in herself enough to dance with abandon. that will never be me. |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
I watched the gypsies dance for you by the glow of campfire a backdrop of midnight stars and wagons in semi circle.............................." This is Just Perfect imagery! ARCTIC WIND |
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brianbeaudry Member
since 2001-07-20
Posts 410Northern Ontario Canada |
It's wonderful to read your work again SEA. Sometimes that which we sould pay more attention to is neglected...this reminds me to let my wife know just how much she means to me tonight |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Lynn~ thanks for understanding AW~ cool beans!  thanksBrian~ awww that was really nice to read. Thank you so much, and good for you, it never hurts to remind the ones we love, that we love them! |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I too am envious. I have had writers block for so long I don't think I could write with such style. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Dee...bah! I know better than that! You got mad skills |
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