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Broken Dreams |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity 
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. As sunshine filters through the shades I rise to meet the day Trying to forget the dreams I fought to chase away Though the daylight hours seem to drag Night soon begins to fall And I find myself alone again Facing Midnights call With no one laying at my side To keep my fears at bay Or in whom I can confide Why did you go away? No one ever told me The pain would be this bad But the thought of some body else loving you Is what really makes me sad Are you still frightened of the thunder And to sleep without the light Do you think of me I wonder Now you have his arms to hold you tight? My soul is torn wide open My world is ripped apart And all of my dreams lay broken Beside my aching heart..... |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
This is not about me thank God, It was written about a close friend.... |
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simon Member
since 2008-01-14
Posts 440London, England |
And I hope that he gets to read this and he won't feel so alone... |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Simon He knows he is not alone, unfortnately, he thinks he can deal with it better if he props up the bar for a few hours......all I can do is be there to pick him up |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
From experience, we know that people just don't leave without what they feel is good cause. A very sensitive write, effjayel..you are indeed a good friend to him. But you can't save him...only he can do that.  |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Sunshine....So true and I will not take sides, I know there is wrong doing by both of them. I also know I cannot save Him, He must do that himself..I only wait in the wings should He need a helping hand ...I believe we must do what we can to help each other as we travel this road of life, I offer whatever support is required and who knows, one day I may need to call on him for help and support. Thanks for your concern & kind reply. John |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
beautifully done. Sad. I knew that two men begged and it worked...of course the two women are wonderful and are very, very kind. Man, sometimes are mindless. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
I will show this to my son , he's going through the same pain Hope |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Tom You are right, sometimes Men do the stupidest things, I try not too & this may sound biased but I think the likes of ourselves are less likely to be as incosiderate as a lot of guys given our poetic slant, Now someone is bound to leap on me & say Keats, Kipling & Shakespeare were sadists or wife beaters ! Seriously, I do think you have to come from a 'gentler' angle if you are in touch with your creative ( Female?) side, don't you agree? Thanks for reading & commenting... Your friend Jayel |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Hope, I am sorry to hear your Son is suffering. I can only imagine the hurt he is going through....I can offer no words that will ease that for Him. I will however, keep Him in my thoughts...I am happy that He has ypou to turn to though... Thank You for replying... John |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
John...Very touching write no matter who it's about, the pain suffered from a lost love is a terrible thing to deal with and you write of it very well.I hope your friend heals their broken heart..Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Thanks Paul... not had to deal with that depth of pain myself so it can be difficult to know what to say or do...all I can do is wait for the 'phone to go, and it will. Just hope I can give the support required... BTW, what happened to your pic, did it fall off or did I break it??? |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
John... it seems like you are a good friend indeed... love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Thanks Roniece, I try, hope you are well.. John |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Fine writing...really touches the heart... Oh yes it must hurt...but he has been set free to find someone that will honestly and equally share his desires...when his heart is ready...James |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
James a wise reply, Thanks I will pass that on to Him..........many thanks for helping spread the load, it is appreciated. John |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
This seemed to flow effortlessly; enjoyed this very compassionate write... miscellanea |
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TomMark Member Elite
since 2007-07-27
Posts 2133LA,CA |
By "mindless" I mean that man shall learn two things 1. A good comment will make a woman work for him for 10 years. 2. Hugs and kisses will tie her 3. if man knows none of the two, then patiently search for the one whom God tailored esp for him. (many don't wait). Anyway, good ladies are everywhere. |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
John, this is a very sensitive and poignant poem so lovingly written and wonderful rhyme So much enjoyed. Lindsay |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
John Such a good friend, you are. I am glad he is in your life and that you are there to show him you care. Are you still frightened of the thunder And to sleep without the light Do you think of me I wonder Now you have his arms to hold you tight? This kind of hit close to home. Very good writing throughout, but this part ... Well, good writing. I keep coming back to read it again. Alison |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Misc This one came to life so quickly, I could barely write it fast enough. I am happy how it came out & glad you enjoyed it. Tom, I understand, you may have rescued yourself with that final comment, but you might get some grief from the Ladies for item No 1 !! Thanks for stopping by again. Lindsay, Thank you for your wonderful comments, I am so happy you liked it. Ali Thanks, I hope it did not bring you too many painful reminders Please Re visit it as often as you wish. All of these heartfelt replies encourage me to keep contributing to Passions John |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"You are right, sometimes Men do the stupidest things..." I agree. And you know that saying "the grass is ( thought to be) greener on the other side of the fence." well it isn't.. as someone once told me, it still has to be maintained. I get tired of hearing today that man is not "made" to be married to only one person for all his life, since we are living longer. I think there are different kinds of love and if its real and you understand it, you will know that sex is not the be all to end all as the media and magazines and movies etc. are making it out to be. In that case why marry, as so many of the younger generation are not doing today..or if they are, it is short lived. There is so much more to a relationship and even though it changes so should the acceptance of aging and all that comes with it. (besides propping up the bar is not a good thing to be doing) I will probably get myself into trouble with my opinion, but still married after 37 years, with the last 7 being very traumatic under the circumstances and one of the reasons I am still here posting, and still there for him until he and I can both stand on our own...shows the deep caring and respect that I have for him as he once was, even though it may seem unappreciated and has been testing me in so many ways. jmo John, you have made me reflect a bit this morning. M |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
John, this is a very sensitive write, I enjoyed reading it and I think too many can relate ... Your friend, like all of us, we have to learn to LET GO, wishing only true happiness to those who have left, it's the only attitude that brings peace and makes the hurt ones ready for new love. Beautifully written. love Margherita  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ouch I remember this feeling all too well you wrote it so perfectly! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
this rhythm is quite catching! |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Vandana & Passing Shadows Thanks for taking the time to read & the trouble to reply.. |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Margherita You are so right again, sometimes I think the prospect of letting go can seem harder than dealing with the consequences of the aftermath, glad you enjoyed..... John |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Poddarku Thank you for the response & separate e mail, I am happy that it struck a chord within... Regards John |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
M How many have climbed the fence only to discover it was a trick of the light & the grass was actually greener in the pasture they deserted..and to then spend every waking hour trying to get back what once was. Even worse, to then complain when a new green keeper takes up residence….you are spot on with the maintenance element too. As for not wanting to be with someone because we are living longer, utter twaddle ! 2 lifetimes is still not long enough when you truly care for some one and I admire you tremendously for supporting your partner through what is obviously very trying times for you both…one can stop loving but not caring I think. I myself have been with the same partner for 28 years & life has had it’s up’s and downs, but I’m still here. I for one would not take you to task for your commitment to Him in this difficult time. One day He will realise how lucky he was to have you stand by him through “Thick & Thin” At the moment, he cannot appreciate what you are doing for him as I am sure he has a lot of anger pushing to the forefront of his mind…..Hang in there and please, do not give up, it WILL all come out right in the finish. I really believe that Best regards John |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
(Sigh). A good write. Sad... K |
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effjayel Senior Member
since 2007-09-30
Posts 1474At the Crossroads of Infinity |
Thanks Kristabell, Yes it is sad, but I'm working on it...(Him...) |
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