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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2008-07-08 06:36 AM

The air stirred,
First time in a month,
She entered.

The curtain comes down
And the shears replaced,
Off comes the quilt blue
And sheets replaced.
On the closet hangs a gown
For glamour in town,
Many years passed since new
Once glamour in town.

Nothing for dusting
Only the carpetless floor
Sweep all wood.

The quilt recovering the bed
And curtains now rehung
Casting it all back to shadows,
Darkness regrows the sorrows,
Now that no light enters windows
For a month of new tomorrows.

She then left,
Glancing at the dresser top,
Where
Pearls in Dust
Mark where time did stop.
The air calms.
Dust
Settles.

Gloom

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2008-07-08 09:09 AM

this is heartbreaking....

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

2 posted 2008-07-08 03:40 PM

This is sad but beautiful writing, Gloom.
Always enjoy the fruits of your pen.
Ida

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2008-07-08 05:15 PM

quote:
She then left,
Glancing at the dresser top,
Where
Pearls in Dust
Mark where time did stop.
The air calms.
Dust
Settles.

Goosebumps, dear Professor Gloom!! Awesome, deeply melancholic write, conveying emotions that won't be forgotten ...

Love,
Margherita

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2008-07-09 05:31 AM

NIce writing...James

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

5 posted 2008-07-09 06:02 AM

Thank you, Sea
I find it somewhat heartwarming, not breaking,
A room as a tribute to a person
Well loved.

Thank you, Marchmadness
I am pleased you enjoyed, next fruit the apple,
Don’t you just enjoy poems about red things?

Thank you, Margherita
I believe you have well analyzed this
Room glimpsed briefly long beyond its time.

Thank you, JamesMichael

And Thanks to others who might have read,
But know not how to respond

Gloom

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

6 posted 2008-07-09 09:24 AM

I'm sorry I didn't mean bad heartbreaking...just it's hard to read, makes me think of my mom with my dad's stuff...it made me feel sad was all...but I did like it very much.

XGarapanX
Senior Member

since 2008-06-19

Posts 1435
Antarctica

7 posted 2008-07-09 05:39 PM

That left a strong image in this readers head. Serious work.

·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`·

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