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Girl At The Gate Of Time
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Girl At The Gate Of Time |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
 Girl At The Gate Of Time It's good that it's Springtime. The Sunflowers are not yet sad- Hanging their heads, Heavy with many cares And little worries to come. The Roses Are whispering Their fragrant Promise Confirming the hope Of Love that can yet be. Mother says That I'm not a child Anymore, That it's time to look ahead And leave those childish ways Behind. My heart isn't ready, Quite yet, Because I'm afraid. I know I was made for Love But, is Love really out there Waiting for me? I hope He can wait a little longer; There's so much I need to know, And I still want to get this white dress A little dirty As I play for just a while more- Dreams and tender time Guarded closely by Persephone. Still, a last deep breath, Though, I hesitate To exhale. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo XGarapanX, I like this a lot. It's excellent work. Bobby |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Here you are! It is wonderful, it touches the soul! Perfect combination of picture and words. Love, Margherita |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
..."I know I was made for Love But, is Love really out there Waiting for me? I hope He can wait a little longer; There's so much I need to know, And I still want to get this white dress A little dirty As I play for just a while more- Dreams and tender time Guarded closely by Persephone"... A Keeper. What magnificent imagery. You have captured the true heart of every woman I know. ~Grin |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Many thanks to all of you great writers. Indeed, this poem was based solely upon this image by my friend, a photographer with an eye for living moments. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
That is a delightful poem my dear and there is certainly nothing wrong in lookink ahead, but retain your childish ways as long as you can, for you will grow up soon enough and with any luck you will have a whole lifetime of being an adult ahead of you. Childhood and adolescence is such a very special time that we don't realise when we are young. Believe me my girl make the most of it while you can and good luck. Lindsay |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you, Lindsay. However, if I read you correctly I believe you have mistaken me for a female. I'm quite male, I assure you, lol! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Garapan, if only there were more men who could enter the heart of a woman or a girl, the world would be a so much gentler and happier place! I love your poem - and the picture that inspired it and that you interpreted so sensitively. - Owl |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
wow! this I really like!  well done.. love RDB Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you RDB, and a special thanks, Ms. Owl, for your gracious comment. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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KeyLimeSorbet Member
since 2008-03-05
Posts 74Colorado |
this is so beautiful, ive read it three times already, and i think ill go read it once more :-) |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
And what is further beautiful to me is that you think so about my poem. I'm glad it has meaning to so many of you. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I sure enjoyed reading this...James |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Such a lovely and thoughtful poem. Ida |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you, thank you. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050 |
A great job here poet. Bravo! Rich |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you, Sir. A gratefully received response from a huge poetic talent of this club! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Oh I am so proud of you...a very emotional write! and I am glad you got that pic thing down... cool picture to match! |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Growing up too fast is a regret that lasts a lifetime. Not in my lifetime, I was a parade of one marching down the street. But anyway, your gentle words are sweet and sincere. You wrote this so nice, Garapan~ |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi Garapan there are many things to learn and then there is nothing to learn without love.... wonderful and meaningful poem. yann |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you Blues, and Islander. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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i_am_patch! Member
since 2008-06-24
Posts 108manila, philippines |
wow.  coolness. "omnia vincit amor" |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
OMG - do I have permission to print this - with your name and copyright of course, and give it to my daughter to hang on her mirror? I think she would love it and it would be great discussion for us.... she's 13. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I think that if I were to say no, I would destroy the very spirit and essence with which I wrote this piece, Ms. Graeshine. Please, help yourself. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
THnak you Brett! |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
Thank you Brett. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
At your service, Lady Grae. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
Lady Grae....I like that! A LOT! |
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LindsayP Member Elite
since 2007-07-28
Posts 3410Australia, Victoria |
Garapan my sincere apollogies my friend, That is a terrible mistake to make but apart from giving you the wrong sex you can still take heed of the message within. Have a good day and take care. Lindsay |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Glad you like the name, lol! And no worries, Mr. Lindsay mate, you are at all times a gentleman of quality, and this I never doubt. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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KeyLimeSorbet Member
since 2008-03-05
Posts 74Colorado |
After I read this a couple of times, I made this guy I was talking to read it because i wanted him to read one specific line that related to him and I "And I still want to get this white dress, A little dirty" Your poem spoke words better than i could :-) |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
I am consumately pleased that in some small way the words of my heart were at your service, KeyLime. That was a report of great significance and I appreciate your sharing. A guy comes to a point where he wants to know what he does has meaning. You just gave that to me, along with Lady Grae. Thank you! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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