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Juliet's Lament
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Juliet's Lament |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
This is set during the period when Juliet was separated from Romeo who had been exiled to Mantua for murder. Juliet's Lament Why is Time late And so long in coming? Unbreechable walls Hold back her hand. And senseless hate Imprisons loves' longing, My Summer love Dwells in Mantua's land. Oh the cruel fate That bore us divided, A choice is now forced Between home and heart. Vast space separates Two souls now decided, And life seems completed Before it can start. Oh would that the Adige Carried me seaward, The heart of Verona Bleed me as a tear. Dark shadow and nothing Adorn as corona This sorrowing soul And the love it holds dear. Oh Romeo, Romeo Wherefore art thou? What mischievious malice Has torn us apart? The Devil's own hand Has prepared us this chalice And a poison that pierces Has stricken these hearts. [Juliet weeps ] End ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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ILoveTheRain Member
since 2008-03-02
Posts 157GA |
Wow, this is very impressive! I admire your talent  |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you, fellow writer. The ending hints towards their eventual fate of death by poison and dagger. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Love can be beautiful you know...lol and yes you just knew how to get my attention,with the title... still a great love story, even through death, love remains, through the written word, telling their stories...long after they are gone... powerful! |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Ah! I'm told it can be, Romantic one. Thanks for stopping in! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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secondhanddreampoet Member Ascendant
since 2006-11-07
Posts 6394a 'Universalist' ! |
VERY fine! I am particularly fond of: "Oh the cruel fate That bore us divided, A choice is now forced Between home and heart. Vast space separates Two souls now decided, And life seems completed Before it can start." serious, sustained applause for this 'penning'! |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Ahh, dear Garapan, you conveyed the pain of Juliet's yearning heart so beautifully! And all the hearts of the world separated by distance can relate ... Very intense and very well written. Love, Margherita |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you both, Marg & Secondhanddp. I am writing a series on the subject and wanted to test the waters with this piece. Glad you liked it. I understand her sorrow because I am also separated by more than miles from the one I love best. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo XGarapanX, This works okay, it's coming right along. It would be easier to read using a plain Navy Blue font. Bobby |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Ok. Thanks for the suggestion, ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Garapan, I, too, admire your talent! Wonderful rendering! miscellanea |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 very nicely done! |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
This is beautiful. You are so very talanted. |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Wow. Coming from this calibre of talent, I am truly grateful for such positive remarks. Awesome! ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
as pointed out, i like the lines about how life is completed before it even starts. poignant observation |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Well, Ms. Kaile, I have the fortune (or mis) of having had experienced many such hopeful promises with a dead end for a conclusion, so it helps me to be mindful of the loss of possibility with it's painful, tragic waste. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
Ahhh, you captured me with this one. A |
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poddarku Senior Member
since 2008-01-15
Posts 589india |
a good one |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Thank you, and thank you. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Her love was strong, and when he died, she wanted to be with his soul in heaven! ARCTIC WIND |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
For a truth, her love was complete. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice writing...James |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
Mahalo. ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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