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Huan Yi
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Waukegan

0 posted 2008-06-28 07:17 PM


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Green as youth
Those summer trees
Full of strength and high ideals

Golden yellow the flowers
That crown the lawns
Offering hope to everyone

Great hawks gyre
With outspread wings
Proud unconquerable oriflammes

And who are the heroes
Off to rescue their cherished loves
That ride as steeds these snowy clouds
Above an azure sea


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© Copyright 2008 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
secondhanddreampoet
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1 posted 2008-06-28 07:23 PM


WOW, John...are you on a grand-fine roll this evening!

In my opinion, this is another particularly exceptional 'write!'

[I can't pick out a 'favorite part'...I'd have to hi-lite the entire 'penning'!]

MUCH loud and long-sustained applause!
[another of those 'poetic standing ovations' for this one!!]

XGarapanX
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2 posted 2008-06-28 11:32 PM


Yay! I love a positive outlook, especially one this well written.

·´~`·­»Garapan«­·´~`·

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
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3 posted 2008-06-29 01:06 AM


John... I love reading you!     love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Huan Yi
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4 posted 2008-06-29 01:21 AM


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Thank you all

John


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2islander2
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by the sea
5 posted 2008-06-29 01:32 AM


Always enjoyable,  
Golden yellow the flowers
That crown the lawns
Offering hope to everyone

reading english this way is a pleasure
yann

ThisDiamond
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6 posted 2008-06-29 12:21 PM


Deeply touching write.
A keeper.

Midnitesun
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7 posted 2008-06-29 01:02 PM


"Great hawks gyre
With outspread wings
Proud unconquerable oriflammes"

Fine imagery and word choice.

ArtSolstice
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8 posted 2008-06-29 03:37 PM


This writing hits a new high. Well done!!
Huan Yi
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Waukegan
9 posted 2008-06-29 03:49 PM


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Thanks to everyone again.

This poem as Jane Kenyon would say
was given to me.

I think it best for me
not to try and manufacture beauty
but merely to wait until it arrives and then
simply record it.

Thanks again

John


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