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Love At First Write
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Love At First Write |
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Richy Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 3050
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 A Modern Day Fairytale Hello out there “Just Looking” I hope everything is fine? I thought that I would say hello, I saw you come online I see that you just registered; this all must be so new? I noticed that, because I joined this evening just like you I’ve never talked to anybody on this world wide web But I figured it was time, the tide’s about to ebb I thought that I would send this email, I’m not quite sure why Maybe it was meant to be, my name is “So Am I” I’m glad to meet you “So Am I” I also wish you well It’s clear you are a gentleman, that’s so easy to tell I thought that I would try to find, someone with whom to share The loneliness of living, in a world with such despair My name is really Cindy, and I’m sorry that I’m sad It’s just that my old stepmother, can’t help but treat me bad For reasons that I’ll never know, she sees me as a threat As well as her two daughters, who are always so upset I’ve never tried to hurt no one, in any kind of way I guess that’s just how things must be, and how they’ll always stay The thing that’s got me really sad, and feeling kind of low Is that there is a ball tonight, and I don’t get to go I’ve never owned a pretty dress, like both my sisters have And even when I try one on, they look at me and laugh I just have no more left to give, and don’t know what to do I guess I’m looking for someone, who feels the same way too So thanks for listening, “So Am I,” but maybe I should go? I didn’t mean to be a burden, with my tale of woe I hope that you can find someone, who treats you really fair Thanks for trying to cheer me up, so long and please take care Cindy wait a minute please, I know just how you feel! I’ve also got some problems, that I’d like to now reveal I too, have never got to go, to any kind of dance! So many times I’ve wanted to, but never took a chance I’ve lived my life so cautiously, afraid to open up Everything I did was measured, by a half filled cup I’ve always done what others said, would be the wisest choice But deep inside I always felt, I had this inner voice It told me not to always follow, things that others say And that if I would really try, I’d always find my way It said that when the roads gets rough, to try and stick it out That trying to help others, is what life is all about My name is really Princeton, and like you I’m often sad I’ve also wondered why I couldn’t, have things others had But one thing I learned early is, that if you have a plan Don’t let the things you cannot do, prevent the things you can So please don’t leave now Cindy, we can make this all come true There’s nothing that can stop us, if it's what we want to do I want for you to get dressed up, with all your finest clothes And meet me there at ten past nine, this I to you propose Oh Princeton, that’s so very kind, but I’ve nothing to wear! I haven’t got the means of travel, nor the funds to spare! My step mom locked me in my room, because my sisters said That I forgot to scrub the floors, and didn’t make their beds Princeton please just go ahead, and have a pleasant time You are young and life is short, I’ll have to stay behind There’s absolutely nothing, in this world that we can do I wish I had a way that I could get myself to you Dear Cindy you must surely have, some pumpkins on the vine? I’m sure you have some glitter, that could make your slippers shine The gourd shall be your chariot, pulled gently by six mice The shoes will softly sparkle, like crushed diamonds trapped in ice We’ll dance the night away, like it belongs to only us We’ll hold each other in such ways, that makes the others blush I’ll gaze into your eyes until, your heart begins to melt I’ll kiss you with a passion that your soul has never felt I’ll lift you in my arms as we both spin into the night Your hair so soft and flowing as I hold you very tight Your graceful charming loveliness, will make the women sigh The sparkle in your eyes, will make the young boys want to cry I’m falling for you Princeton, so much more then just a friend! I wish this night could always last, and never have to end! But Darling I must leave you now, the time is drawing near I think that it is best for us, if I just disappear This night I’ll always cherish, and keep close upon my heart I’m sorry I can’t finish something, that we tried to start I just want you to know that you, have touched me very deep And leaving now will only make, my heart forever weep I wish this lovely fairytale, would somehow just come true I wish that I was Cinderella, and the Prince was you But most of all I really wish, that someday there would be Someone who would want to spend their life with only me I’m looking for someone to share, their love with all that’s mine That person who would always love me, till the end of time No man has ever kissed my lips, or held me very tight No one has ever made me feel, the way you did tonight Dear Cindy can you feel me, as I hold you in my heart? It felt like we were meant to be, together from the start I want to know you more then anybody has before I want to feel your soft embrace, and love you evermore! Dear Princeton I just can’t believe, you really want me too I really want to hold you now, and make this all come true! I don’t know what I did that brought, you close into my heart I only know I never want, for us to be apart Dear Cindy will you meet me on this starlit summer's eve? I promise if you‘ll have me, that my love will never leave! Yes Darling I will come to you, if you will promise this? That just in case this is a dream, don’t pinch me till we kiss! Freedom of expression is our, write. |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
You are such a romantic, my friend, and you tell a wonderful story that kept me captivated. Thank you - and know that you made my heart smile tonight. Alison |
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XGarapanX Senior Member
since 2008-06-19
Posts 1435Antarctica |
A wonderful twist on the tale.  ·´~`·»Garapan«·´~`· |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Oh, Richy, I do so want you to find that mystical, mystery woman of yours. You really deserve her and it is devastating to think of such a waste of a good man, for you not to find her, and for you not to realise your dream. The problem, of course, as I have said before, is to find one worthy of you. Your poem was magical, and so superbly put together. The picture was brilliant. The woman is beautiful, but doll-like and unreal which unnerved me a bit before I read the poem, but after I had read it, I couldn’t believe how excellent the match to the poem is. The cyber conversation in the poem and the names of the people are so apt, and of course, the title of the poem is perfect. You have such a way with words that, like an impressionistic painter, you blend into an unblemished whole, so many different layers and themes, the old tale and your new creation; fairytale magic and realism; despair and hope; sadness and humour; longing and its solution; lightness and darkness; superficiality and depth. And again, as usual, you had me, as I am sure anyone who reads this, hanging on every word. This poem is yet another that makes me wish I was still an English teacher because I would love to share and discuss this with a whole class of young enquiring and thirsty minds. Thank you for another rich Richy treasure. - Owl |
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