Open Poetry #42 |
Abyss |
graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
I can’t take the silence That speaks louder than words. Wordy silences in my mind That have been around too long. Like a spider’s web that has outgrown it usefullness; Even a spider must move on. When did we become travelers in different far away lands? At what junction did our soujourn part? Why did our final destination end up in an abyss, Only to be escaped through jagged peaks And steep sloped hills, landscaped by confusion and doubt? That you do not understand my want and need To do things with you ... kills me. That your passion is not me... kills me. That your addiction is not your family ... kills me. That you may be thinking these words are ridiculous... kills me. When we met, I did not camp, I did not fish. When we met, I was a compassionate person, Willing to listen and hear your words. Now the words mean nothing to me. They hang on the end of a hook losing their battle to a weak line. I can’t take the distance of ourselves When our bodies are so close. Silence is not a blanket to cloak your wounds. It is not a shroud to cover your feelings. Ask me, seek me, talk to me, appreciate me.. I am your family. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Oh, dear Debra, this is extremely well rendered frustration. This hurts and makes me want to reach out with a big hug. In a relationship there is nothing worse than silence ... A very significant write! Love, Margherita |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Silence is not always golden! The sort of silence of which you write, can hurt like hades!!! ~ and of that, you have made painfully ~ yet poetically ~ clear! Very well done! Wrapping my arms around you, Linda PS It was so good to see a photo of you! You are very pretty! |
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graeshine2006 Member
since 2008-06-03
Posts 368The Prairie Lands, USA |
THank you so much for the kind words. This was my first poem I wrote after about 15 years of NOT writing anything. It was when my ex-husband and I separated. I got it out about three months ago, posted it on myspace, and got some good feedback from it..... hence, I started writing again and ended up here! Yeahhh.... for that I am so glad! |
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Prasad Nataraj Senior Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 1149Bangalore,India |
Hi Deb, emotions well expressed. Yes, silence is a very dangerous weapon, it kills relationships. Nice write. Prasad. |
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sewasham Senior Member
since 2006-09-11
Posts 714Oklahoma, USA |
You've put this in words very well. The silent treatment can be pretty tough. Good job. Take care and Have fun. Steve |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Sorry to hear about this, Debby. Yes, those silences are hard. - Owl |
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