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Michyla
Junior Member

since 2008-02-06

Posts 15
qld, australia.

0 posted 2008-02-09 02:51 AM

LAST KISS

from that last kiss,
i knew i had your heart,
but it's not hard to miss,
we are so far apart,

i know in my mind,
the kiss meant nothing,
though the past is far behind,
you're still my everything,

my mind is often wrong,
but my heart now knows,
i won't be gone for too long,
before to you it shows,

for now i can only wait,
the future will come soon,
and also my secret fate,
will be your hefty boon.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2008-02-09 09:30 AM

Michyla~
Welcome to our circle of poetic friends~

Nice writing ... your name is lovely also~

Enjoy your stay with us~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The sound of a kiss is not as strong as that of a cannon, but it's echo endures much longer*~
Email - [email protected]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2008-02-09 09:34 AM

Welcome to Passions, Michyla.

Please check your email for a Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2008-02-09 10:29 AM

nice entry poem

welcome to Passions!

Bobby Jordan
Member

since 2007-08-13

Posts 491
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

4 posted 2008-02-09 11:07 AM

Michyla,

I'd go over this, and try it with Standard English Language punctuation and capitalization.

That would make it easier to read.

Welcome to here. The idea is fine.

Bobby

ctowen
Member Elite

since 2001-10-18

Posts 2286
Green Mountains of VT

5 posted 2008-02-09 12:49 PM

I am one to believe that it's the raw emotion
   that makes our words and feelings

              ....  POETRY IN MOTION!

   Welcome and keep up the good work.

Ct

In rhythms to a rise the days shall follow ... each Yesterday, each Tomorrow. - Ct/05

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

6 posted 2008-02-09 02:44 PM

Michyla,

Your first efforts are way beyond what mine were. Lovely poem, filled with much emotion - I like it.

Welcome to P.I.P. - please continue to share and let us enjoy the growth that will come to you. It has happened to us all, I bet. We grow together.

Welcome,
Alison

Michyla
Junior Member

since 2008-02-06

Posts 15
qld, australia.

7 posted 2008-02-09 06:08 PM

thanks guys. personally i don't like it, it just seems too.. simple? or something along those lines. my sister's poems are much better, i am only getting an interest in poetry because of her.

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

8 posted 2008-02-10 02:48 PM

Hello, Michyla! Welcome aboard the pip ship! I hope you enjoy sailing these seas of blue as much as I have.

May this be the first of many poems that you will write. Emote away! It's good for our sense of well-being.

Giving you a warm, welcoming hug,

Earth Angel

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

9 posted 2008-02-10 04:32 PM

WELCOME TO PIP!

MAY YOU HAVE FUN HERE WITH EVERYONE AND WRITING!

ARCTIC WIND

Sunshine

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2008-02-10 06:17 PM

Michyla...

simple is where we start.
Depth is where we live.

Michyla
Junior Member

since 2008-02-06

Posts 15
qld, australia.

11 posted 2008-02-11 01:25 AM

thanks evryone. the poetry everyone on here writes is beautiful. top notch guys. =)

the sun is for the days.. the moon for the nights.. but you are forever.

Rick
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 2903
Victoria, Australia

12 posted 2008-02-11 12:43 PM

Welcome Aussie friend to these pages of blue, enjoyed your write; hope you enjoy your stay and journey with us all, it is a great place to visit and relax.
Have a wonderful day.

Rick

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

13 posted 2008-02-14 05:06 AM

hello Michyla... welcome to our pages blue... sorry for the late welcome, just noticed your icon blinking at me!

lovely poem, keep up the good writing... love RDB

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

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