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graeshine2006
Member

since 2008-06-03

Posts 368
The Prairie Lands, USA

0 posted 2008-06-04 09:54 PM

I understand your whitewash waterfall of tears,
Flowing into the cavernous heart of your fears.
Sharing of pain in the damp, dank air;
Wondering why I even care.

Emotions swirling in cyclonic waters,
Drowning deep aches with wasted mind fodder.
Your mind and spirit has opened a vault,
On whose heart lies what happened? ’Tis only fate’s fault.

Twas not romance but a connection came free,
A river of pain, churning the blood in me.
Not linked by gold ring nor bound by love’s rope
Just droplets of time, sharing together some hope.

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2008-06-05 02:52 AM

Graeshine, I suspect that this is in reply to Karilea's poem on family - or perhaps, hers is in response to yours - or perhaps I am completely off track, but I don't think so.

Much enjoyed your poem. Family is life-blood, no matter how small or extended. You and your aunt are lucky to have each other.

Welcome again.

- Owl

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

2 posted 2008-06-05 07:36 AM

Graeshine2006,

Poetry does not have to rhyme. I'm afraid this is rather forced.

Bobby

graeshine2006
Member

since 2008-06-03

Posts 368
The Prairie Lands, USA

3 posted 2008-06-05 11:03 AM

Thank you Owl. Actually, it was written a long time ago with a friend in mind who was going through much the same emotions as I was with my divorce.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2008-06-05 12:22 PM

This poem is liking me, Deb...

a lot!

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

5 posted 2008-06-05 09:11 PM

liked this muchly...specially this:
"Emotions swirling in cyclonic waters,
Drowning deep aches with wasted mind fodder."

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

6 posted 2008-06-08 08:13 AM

quote:
Not linked by gold ring nor bound by love’s rope
Just droplets of time, sharing together some hope.

Very beautiful and wise too.

Love,
Margherita

Prasad Nataraj
Senior Member

since 2008-05-29

Posts 1149
Bangalore,India

7 posted 2008-06-08 08:38 AM

Hi graeshine2006, Family is the life blood for most of us, so is poetry. Nice write. Prasad

"Hardwork pays in the long run"

DieterTaljaard
New Member

since 2008-06-05

Posts 8

8 posted 2008-06-08 09:27 AM

Very Good :-)
Could feel this one,maybe not because I myself never devorced,but in love one has these feelings of loosing hope,but always seem to be proven wrong,thanx

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