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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa 
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Hello everyone, another newbie throwing her attempt open to the world. (I'll duck as needed when the shoes come flying... ) Dream My dream was thus: A wooded glade, and moonlight streaming down like scarves of silk, so delicate, through trees and leaves and to the ground. I saw a figure sleeping there, stretched in the fragrant grass: She wore my face and in repose looked pale and cold and fair. Then from the east a movement came and from the wood it stepped: Its mane a blowing, tail a flowing, hooves struck sparks of forest green as to my other self it strode and with its golden horn aglow gently touched her sleeping brow. She woke at that, my other self, with nimble poise she rose, touched the slender graceful neck and stroked the velvet nose. Then she bowed with deep respect, looked in the liquid eyes. Like the center of a storm they were: eternal movement caged and tamed yet burning still with fearless will and courage never shamed. It then bent down, that shining soul: allowed my other self to mount. Its mane she gripped, it read her thought and through the forest night they rode. Like faerie steed and _Sídhe_ they flew and where they went, they only knew. I woke this morn, the dream but wisps the woodland glade but haze. But through me pounds the rhythm still: the hooves, the wind, the daze. And on my forehead, soft but glowing shines a mark but rarely seen: A hoof, a horn, what is it showing, and is it real, or just a dream? Remember the three R's: |
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Joyce Johnson
since 2001-03-10
Posts 9912Washington State |
Lovely and fanciful. Joyce |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Thank you Joyce! By the way, I made an illustration for this poem which you can look at here. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
Welcome to Pips with your mystical flight a fancy that kept my attention through the last line. Wonderful first post! R |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Thank you, Robert! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
BRAVO! What a fun magical write! I enjoyed this immensely! Welcome to Pips. I look forward to more from your pen. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
First attempts? Bring more on, please! Welcome to Passions! Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting! " It matters not this distance now " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Thank you so much Midnitesun and Sunshine! I'm so glad you like it! And thanks for the card, Sunshine! Very cool to find my own poem there ... how do I get my own picture linked to it?  |
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xTr3m3sT Member
since 2008-03-03
Posts 415 |
Excellent poem... |
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TinaTrivett Senior Member
since 2006-07-15
Posts 569 |
This is a lovely fairytale write...fine job.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Welcome to pipTalk, Leoni! Your fantazzmagorical debuting poem, certainly captured my imaginationation! What a delightful read! I checked out the link you gave in one of your replies, and was blown away by your gorgeous illustration you made for this poem. You are very talented! I also noticed your sweet, smiling face there. It would be wonderful to have it posted here at pip as well!  Giving you a very warm, welcoming pip hug ~ and a high five! Earth Angel  |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Thank you everyone, your feedback means a lot to me! @Earth Angel: Ah, I'm so glad you like the illustration! And I'd love to get my photo up here, it seems I have a few posts to go, still. One of these days ... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Your artwork and photos are beautiful and inspiring! I like fantasy...my favorite photo was the sun through the clouds, and I liked the comet one as well. Welcome to PIP! You have alot of talent to share! You know you're in love, when you can't fall asleep,because reality is finally better than your dream~Dr.Seuss |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
@Romantic Heart: Thanks so much for visiting my profile at RedBubble! I'm glad you like my pics That comet was such a stroke of luck, it was cloudy all the time except that one evening. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
oh this was a wonderful read! Welcome to our pages blue Leoni_v! love RDBBe kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight......... |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Thank you, Roniece! It looks like a fun place to hang out! |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
Love fantasy. No shoes will be thrown at this one. Ida |
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Ray Sharpe Member
since 2008-05-29
Posts 112Tenerife |
what a wonderful magical piece....and I love the painting.......thank you for sharing you talents! |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Thank you, thank you! Or Dankie, dankie! in Afrikaans |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Welcome, oh, welcome to PIP, you unicorn-loving, (you have to be horse-loving too), fellow-South African! I loved your poem - was held spell-bound every step of the way. No shoes will be thrown at you by anyone in PIP. We are a friendly bunch. My favourite part of your poem was the unicorn (don't let me get started on my beloved Flicka who went to Heaven 6 years ago on 28 April - the most wonderful horse in the world). I adore my country, and it seems you do too. What a delight to meet you! - Owl |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Hi Owl, nice to meet you too! I'm so glad you liked my poem. It just came to me one Saturday morning Yes I love horses! Learned to ride only last year, and had to stop because of back problems, but I love them anyway. And unicorns, well, wouldn't it be just perfect to have a unicorn. Love my country even though it sometimes drives me up the wall, lol! But I always figure that would be true anywhere in the world. |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I KNEW it! - That you love horses. Sorry you had to give up riding so soon after you started. Yes, now is not the best time to be proudly South African after the xenophobic attacks! - Owl |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Hehe, I do plan to ride again! I've got all the gear, can't let it go to waste! Some day soon I'll be optimistic and hope our national problems straighten themselves out soon |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
Glad to hear that you plan to ride again! Funny thing, now that I think of it. When I was pregnant with my first child and I hadn't ridden for 10 days because it had rained solidly for the 10 days, I developed an excruciating backache. When the rain stopped, I wondered whether I would be able to ride with that very severe backache. I thought that it couldn't get any worse, so I went riding, and in less than the 5 minutes that it took to ride to the top of a hill, my backache had disappeared completely and stayed disappeared for the rest of my pregnancy. - Owl |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
I guess I overdid it, riding out for too long without the stamina or trained muscles. I could handle the pain, but the dead legs for days afterward were another matter. I dreamed last night that I was riding, so it had better be soon |
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OwlSA Member Rara Avis
since 2005-11-07
Posts 9347Durban, South Africa |
I hope it will be soon. Perhaps you could email me when you do get to ride, and share the experience with me. I love hearing about horses. I can't remember whether I saw replies from you to Midnitesun's latest horse poems, but if you haven't seen them, maybe you would like to do a search on her poetry and read them. Her daughter Sara is a trainer of Lippizaners - ooh, I see my skin going green with envy, just with telling you this. - Owl |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
I'll have a look, thank you Owl! My trainer just moved to Mozambique so I'm out of a place to ride close by. Will have to look around a bit  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well I have to first of all welcome you - so welcome! Secondly, I loved your poem, but I live in a mature mind of fantasy, and plan on staying there Thirdly, I have followed your work at deviant art along with Enalya for years, and bought many of your cards, as I have also done with her. I am delighted you have come to this site. Now that I found your home site I can spend hours there like I did this morning viewing your art. Art and poetry go hand in hand, and we are so glad to hold yours now here too.  p.s. I love the ecard function on your site - that is awesome - thank you. Count me in -I registered. |
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leoni_v Member
since 2008-05-28
Posts 54Mpumalanga, South Africa |
Hi Mysteria, thanks for the welcome! Glad you like my poem and my pics. But I have to disappoint you, I've never sold anything through deviantArt, so you must have followed someone else there. my devArt username is mainbearing.Wow, I now have 4 registered users at my e-card gallery, I'd better upload some new pics! |
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