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Open Poetry #42

brick glisten forbidden

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2008-05-27 10:01 PM

I didn't come back there on purpose
it was just something in the pen
or maybe the bricks on the wall
that wore your perfume
when you were being distant proper

I read the red of your glisten
on lips that pronounced ladylike
even when your eyes were not
but you did look away quickly
when my shadow was noticeably tall

and the backs of our hands touched
even when our nervous fingers didn't
but could have perhaps at another time
on different horses of fleshly metal
like the leaves we moved with bare feet

while dancing under cigar ended stars

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daark

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-05-27 10:17 PM

Yo Dark Stranger,

I liked this one. The line about "cigar ended stars" made me look at my stogie. I can picture that.

Bobby

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

2 posted 2008-05-27 10:26 PM

Thanks RJ...was just thinking the same thing while burning one here.

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

3 posted 2008-05-27 11:08 PM

No matter how many times I read this one, D, I like it better. So, I am liking it lots and lots by now.

A

Roniece Dawson-Bruce
Member Ascendant

since 2000-01-29

Posts 5689
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2008-05-28 04:09 AM

me too... x

Be kind at heart....for everyone you meet has their own battle to fight.........

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

5 posted 2008-05-28 05:52 AM

ms ali-san, thanks little one, you make me smile

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ms r&b, thanks babe for the eyes here

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

6 posted 2008-05-28 11:20 PM

"cigar ended stars" ...would never have thought of it like that myself, but love the picturesque quality of the image

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