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unboundpoetess
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0 posted 2008-05-27 08:10 PM




The face that I had loved so well
lost in Nod's misty rivers
as I looked long by the railing
so utterly lost
in her

bowed serenely in larkish prayer.
The changeling was unaware
slipping through time's filmy chaplet
wreathed by fireflies and melody
she fell

into inevitable chrysalis.
Babyhood flickered
in that last exhale.
Furled smoke emerged
ocean-eyed
flutterby.

I wept to wet her wings.

© Copyright 2008 Heather - All Rights Reserved
Dark Stranger
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1 posted 2008-05-27 09:38 PM


the images you leak onto your penchin, are photos of nearly ghostly eros..enjoyed this one
steavenr
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2 posted 2008-05-28 03:20 PM


interesting write...loved this line best: "I wept to wet her wings"
unboundpoetess
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3 posted 2008-05-28 09:21 PM


Thank you so much, Your Darkness.
~H


So delighted, Steaven, that you found something here to enjoy.
~H

Margherita
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4 posted 2008-05-29 07:11 PM


Dear Heather, welcome to Pip!

Your first entry unveils a wonderfully talented poetess.

Extraordinary work.

Love,
Margherita

unboundpoetess
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5 posted 2008-05-29 09:29 PM


Margherita,
Thank you for the warm (and first official) welcome.

I look forward to meeting you more.

In Light,
Heather

OwlSA
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6 posted 2008-05-30 05:23 AM


I read this before, but was too upset by it to reply.  It is very beautiful.  Tears are flowing again for the beautiful, five-year old child and the reflection of her in the short-lived butterfly whose short life was cut even shorter.  

Hugs
- Owl

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7 posted 2008-05-30 04:26 PM


Heather, this is profoundly beautiful!

Please, check your email for a Very Special Greeting!

" It matters not this distance now  " Excerpt, Yesterday's Love
~*~
KRJ

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8 posted 2008-06-01 03:48 AM


Heather,

This is so lovely.  Welcome to PiP and thank you for reading my poems.  It's going to be great to get to know you.

Alison

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9 posted 2008-06-01 04:29 AM


I love it when we add a new poet to Pip, especially one whose writing I enjoy so much.
Welcome and keep them coming.
                             Ida

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