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Open Poetry #42

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Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2008-05-19 11:47 AM

you never wanted to touch someone
who is lost failing their
own redemption.

you never wanted to feel someone
gone from their prime
lost in religion.

you always pass on by
the fallen down
who may be just jesus.

you stomp on by the cries
of the city torn apart
by how you view it.

its time you left your heart
on the side of life
so maybe you'll hear it.

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2008-05-19 12:02 PM

ouch...

this is great.

shyvl
Senior Member

since 2008-04-11

Posts 531
texas, usa

2 posted 2008-05-19 01:18 PM

Great message and well written. I think I might consider dropping the 4th stanza- But I could just not be interpreting it correctly. All in all this piece can me much to consider about how I face the fallen and despaired in this world.
sharyn

steavenr
Member Elite

since 2003-11-17

Posts 4058

3 posted 2008-05-20 10:39 PM

enigmatic...touching write

RC Langill
Member

since 2008-03-09

Posts 104

4 posted 2008-05-21 01:11 AM

As we pass by those whose main difference is that they are living a life we don't care to imagine, it is so easy to let our fear shield out the message your poem reveals.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2008-05-21 11:02 AM

awesome!

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

6 posted 2008-05-21 11:19 AM

thanks all of you......nice to be back

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