Poetic Rap (very hard to do)

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Open Poetry #42

Poetic Rap (very hard to do)

xTr3m3sT
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since 2008-03-03

Posts 415

0 posted 2008-05-15 06:02 PM

My mind is exploding and destroying,
my thoughts while imploding and the images are toying
with my mind, it can't be kind
it will break my spine and kill all of my kind
this world is filled with crime, and at this time
I got nickles and dimes, I'm sublime
people are to egotistical and I mean that in the litteral
sence not the political aspect of that criminal tense
that these people use to lock us in a fence
so our knees might give out and we'll end up in suspence
and die with flowers around our final sequence
innocent blood is the only thing that quenches the thirst
of fate that tempts me first, but I'm about to burst
like a coca cola bottle that just got shaken up
like a alchoholic that hasn't had his cup
of beer and booze, but I fear
that this may be my final year
so cheer me on, and don't let me dissapear
in the belly of the beast that will leave me here
In this damned planet, this sorrow filled sphere
who peers in my soul's window frame
that smashes against my intangible fame
so I should dash to the finish line of my career
that thrashes through my heart, like a spear
I hate these wear and tears, these worthless tears
that whispers to my soul, that rings in my ears
my life is played on a projecter
the movie is called, ''Life, the rejecter''
because I was never accepted in a crowd
they always rejected me, but I was proud
and kept on doing, what I do best
and that's smashing people in the chest
with verbal bullets that tears through the flesh
my words can even penetrate through a chain mesh
So please tell me, what is it that I have to do next
because as of right now I'm not writting no more text.

Robert E. Jordan
Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-25

Posts 8541
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania

1 posted 2008-05-15 08:42 PM

Angel,

The thought is there in this one. I'd go back and check some of the spelling.

Bobby

Alison

Member Rara Avis

since 2008-01-27

Posts 9318
Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy!

2 posted 2008-05-24 01:36 AM

This is powerful. It might be the best one that I have read of yours.

Keep it up, my friend.

Alison

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