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looking at an old photography |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
On an old photo of the brothers Lumière, you knit the present, the red wool slides between your fingers to make a pullover, This one which i wear warmly to be forgot that as you and your sunny hair I shall make one day too left of past. [This message has been edited by 2islander2 (05-12-2008 01:04 PM).] |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Yann, I'm afraid that this is not at all clear in English, at least not to me. I'm sure the theme is good however. Bobby [This message has been edited by Robert E. Jordan (05-11-2008 07:16 PM).] |
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shyvl Senior Member
since 2008-04-11
Posts 531texas, usa |
Hi Yann this is what this means to me "Crossing this old photo from the brothers Lumière, you weave the present, the red clear wool slips between your fingers to make a pullover, This one which i wear warmly" You find an old photograph In it someone close to you is weaving you a red sweater you are wearing that same sweater today "to be forgot that as you and your sunny hair i shall make too one day part of past." And you want them to know just as the photograph causes you to remember always, one day a photograph of you doing something will bring memories to someone else. That sound rather long-winded and complicated. Your words are so eloquent. I love reading your simple imagings of important life happenings. sharyn |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
I'm sorry Bobby it is not very clear, you know that english is not my first language, i suppose we can cross a photo with the look, I suppose too we can weave the present by letting it possessing us...I'm sorry it didn't sound english.... regards yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Sharyn I think you are a very helpful girl cause you deciphered perfectly and exactly the meaning of the poem. All you say is what I tried to mean except I didn't know the person on the photography...It was a little red blond air girl weaving a pullover ....Yes indeed I will be watched like her some day, being dead but present on an old photo... Perhaps there are grammar mistakes but i'm not so good to correct it, I apologize... yann have a great day yann |
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steavenr Member Elite
since 2003-11-17
Posts 4058 |
regardless of your English, your poetry is fine...nicely done...enjoyed |
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Robert E. Jordan Member Rara Avis
since 2008-01-25
Posts 8541Philadelphia, Pennsylvania |
Yo Yann, Hang in there, your English is coming right along. Keep posting your good poems. Bobby |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hello Bobby, I've taken a translator on the web, this is the result, I hope it's better... I thank you again for your constructive comments. yann |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
thank you steavenr and vandana...I enjoyed reading your comments... yann |
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